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The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.
The pie charts compare the percentage of three different electricity sources produced in four major countries from 2003 to 2008. Overall, while Vietnam and India produced considerably higher electricity from fossil fuel, Sweden and Morocco appeared to harness hydro power as their main electricity source. Only India and Sweden had electricity produced from nuclear power. Among four mentioned nations, India electricity depended mostly on fossil fuel, which accounted for over four fifths. Meanwhile, Sweden and Morocco used only 4 per cent and 5 per cent this source, respectively, for electricity production. Hydro power was used mainly in Morocco, which made up 95 per cent, followed by Sweden, where over a half electricity production was responsible by hydro power, while India electricity production depended 14 per cent on this source, which was the smallest figure compared to other nations. Nuclear power, however, was exploited only in India and Sweden, which consituted 4 per cent and 44 per cent, respectively.
The pie charts compare the percentage of three
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electricity
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sources
produced in four major countries from 2003 to 2008.

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, while Vietnam and India produced
considerably
higher
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electricity
from fossil fuel, Sweden and Morocco appeared to harness hydro
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power
as their main
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electricity
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source
.
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Only
India and Sweden had
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electricity
produced from nuclear power.

Among four mentioned nations, India
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electricity
depended
mostly
on fossil fuel, which accounted for over four fifths. Meanwhile, Sweden and Morocco
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used
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only
4 per cent and 5 per cent this
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source
,
respectively
, for
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electricity
production.

Hydro
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power
was
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used
mainly
in Morocco, which made up 95 per cent, followed by Sweden, where over a half
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electricity
production was responsible by hydro
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power
, while India
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electricity
production depended 14 per cent on this
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source
, which was the smallest figure compared to other nations.

Nuclear
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power
,
however
,
was exploited
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only
in India and Sweden, which
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consituted
4 per cent and 44 per cent,
respectively
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IELTS academic The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.

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