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The illustration shows a bicycle, which is an environmentally friendly vehicle. Describe this vehicle and its environmentally friendly feature. v.2

The illustration shows a bicycle, which is an environmentally friendly vehicle. Describe this vehicle and its environmentally friendly feature. v. 2
The diagram depicts the structure of a bicycle which is designed-created for more convenient transportation. The bicycle is divide into two parts, including the first part use to convert human force into motion and the second part is the frame connect to the first part. The first part of the bicycle includes many sections such as a pedal, two wheels, and special a chain. Both two wheels have a rim surrounded by a tire to make the motion more smooth and the spokes are the important section which uses to hold and create the structure of the wheels. Furthermore, the first part also has a brain of the bicycle which is a device to convert the power of humans into spin motion. This device includes crank, chain, rear derailleur, pedal, and the front derailleur. Those sections have their own effect on the motion of the bicycle and all effect be connected into one device. The chain is the main section of this device which connects a big crank and two small cranks and the rear derailleur have an effect to keep two small cranks balance motion. The pedal is a section which is created to convert and be the pedestal of the cyclists; feet. The second part which have a effect to connect all of the sections of the bicycle. The pump and the saddle make distance between people and wheels and be a seat for people. Furthermore, crossbar, front brake, rear brake all create the bicycle frame. The last section of this frame is the handlebars which help people to hold and navigation move for people. In conclusion, all of the bicycle’s sections are friendly to the environment and the power to motion is the power of humans. In additions, a bicycle is the mean of transport which have more benefit to the environment than other popular means of transports.
The diagram depicts the structure of a
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bicycle
which
is designed
-created for more convenient transportation.

The
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bicycle
is divide into two
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parts
, including the
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first
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part
Make sure that 'use to' is correct. For habitual actions in the past or to mean 'accustomed to', use "used to".
use to
convert human force into
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motion
and the second
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part
is the frame connect to the
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first
part.

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The
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first
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part
of the
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bicycle
includes
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many
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sections
such as a pedal, two
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wheels
, and special a chain. Both two
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wheels
have a rim surrounded by a tire to
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make
the
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motion
more smooth and the spokes are the
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important
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section
which
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uses
to hold and create the structure of the
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wheels
.
Furthermore
, the
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first
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part
also
has a brain of the
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bicycle
which is a
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device
to convert the power of humans into spin
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motion
. This
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device
includes crank, chain, rear derailleur, pedal, and the front derailleur. Those
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sections
have their
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own
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effect
on the
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motion
of the
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bicycle
and all
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effect
be connected
into one
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device
. The chain is the main
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section
of this
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device
which connects a
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big
crank and two
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small
cranks and the rear derailleur have an
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effect
to
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keep
two
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small
cranks balance
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motion
. The pedal is a
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section
which
is created
to convert and be the pedestal of the cyclists; feet.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
second
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part
which have
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a
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effect
to connect
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all of the
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sections
of the
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bicycle
.
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The
pump and the saddle
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make
distance between
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people
and
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wheels
and be a seat for
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people
.
Furthermore
, crossbar, front brake, rear brake all create the
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bicycle
frame. The last
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section
of this frame is the handlebars which
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help
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people
to hold and navigation
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

In conclusion
,
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all of the
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bicycle’s
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sections
are friendly to the environment and the power to
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motion
is the power of humans. In additions, a
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bicycle
is the mean of transport which have more benefit to the environment than other popular means of transports.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS academic The illustration shows a bicycle, which is an environmentally friendly vehicle. Describe this vehicle and its environmentally friendly feature. v. 2

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
311 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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