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The illustration below shows the proportions of people living in different types of houses in three different areas in 2012 in Denmark. v. 1

The table data compares people’s accommodation in Green Park area, Central area and  Central Park area in Denmark in 2012. The types of accommodation listed are terrace houses, semi-detached houses, detached houses and bungalows. Overall, Green park inhabitants preferred terrace houses, while most of the citizens in the Central area lived in terrace-houses and bungalows while the main housing type in Central Park area was Bungalows. According to the table data, the two-third populace in Green Park area in Denmark lived in terrace houses in 2012. 15% lived in detached houses while the remaining 10% were equally distributed in semi-terrace houses and Bungalows. Again, Terrance houses and Bungalows were the two most common housing types in the Central area with 45% and 35% dwellers respectively. 15% people in this area were in semi-detached houses and the remaining in detached houses. Finally, Bungalows were the primary accommodation type in Central Park are with 65% dwellers. One-quarter residents preferred terrace houses and the remaining one-tenth people lived in either a semi-detached or a detached house.

IELTS academic The illustration below shows the proportions of people living in different types of houses in three different areas in 2012 in Denmark. v.1

The table data compares
people
’s accommodation in Green
Park
area
,
Central
area
and
 
Central
Park
area
in Denmark in 2012. The
types
of accommodation listed are
terrace
houses
, semi-detached
houses
,
detached
houses
and
bungalows
.
Overall
, Green
park
inhabitants preferred
terrace
houses
, while most of the citizens in the
Central
area
lived
in terrace-
houses
and
bungalows
while the main housing
type
in
Central
Park
area
was Bungalows. According to the table data, the two-third populace in Green
Park
area
in Denmark
lived
in
terrace
houses
in 2012. 15%
lived
in
detached
houses
while the remaining 10% were
equally
distributed in semi-terrace
houses
and Bungalows. Again, Terrance
houses
and
Bungalows
were the two most common housing
types
in the
Central
area
with 45% and 35% dwellers
respectively
. 15%
people
in this
area
were in semi-detached
houses
and the remaining in
detached
houses
.
Finally
,
Bungalows
were the primary accommodation
type
in
Central
Park
are with 65% dwellers. One-quarter residents preferred
terrace
houses
and the remaining one-tenth
people
lived
in either a semi-detached or a
detached
house
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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4 paragraphs
173 words
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