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The graph below shows the percentage sales of trainers made by a sportwear company in one year. The Flying Boots trainers were lunched at the beginning of that year. v.1

The graph below shows the percentage sales of trainers made by a sportwear company in one year. The Flying Boots trainers were lunched at the beginning of that year. v. 1
The line graph compares three companies in terms of their waste output between the years 2000 and 2015. It is clear that there were significant changes in the amounts of waste produced by all three companies shown on the graph. While companies A and B saw waste output fall over the 15-year period, the amount of waste produced by company C increased considerably. In 2000, company A produced 12 tonnes of waste, while companies B and C produced around 8 tonnes and 4 tonnes of waste material respectively. Over the following 5 years, the waste output of companies B and C rose by around 2 tonnes, but the figure for company A fell by approximately 1 tonne. From 2005 to 2015, company A cut waste production by roughly 3 tonnes, and company B reduced its waste by around 7 tonnes. By contrast, company C saw an increase in waste production of approximately 4 tonnes over the same 10-year period. By 2015, company C’s waste output had risen to 10 tonnes, while the respective amounts of waste from companies A and B had dropped to 8 tonnes and only 3 tonnes.
The line graph compares three
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companies
in terms of their
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output
between the years 2000 and 2015.

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changes
in the amounts of
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waste
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produced
by all three
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companies
shown on the graph. While
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companies
A and B
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saw
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waste
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output
fall over the
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15-year
period, the amount of
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waste
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produced
by
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company
C increased
considerably
.

In 2000,
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company
A
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produced
12 tonnes of
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, while
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companies
B and C
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produced
around 8 tonnes and 4 tonnes of
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waste
material
respectively
. Over the following 5 years, the
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waste
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output
of
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B and C rose by around 2 tonnes,
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the figure for
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company
A fell by approximately 1 tonne.

From 2005 to 2015,
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company
A
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cut
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waste
production by roughly 3 tonnes, and
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company
B
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reduced
its
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waste
by around 7 tonnes. By contrast,
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company
C
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saw
an increase in
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production of approximately 4 tonnes over the same
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10-year
period. By 2015,
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company
C’s
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waste
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output
had risen to 10 tonnes, while the respective amounts of
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from
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companies
A and B had dropped to 8 tonnes and
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3 tonnes.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the percentage sales of trainers made by a sportwear company in one year. The Flying Boots trainers were lunched at the beginning of that year. v. 1

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
190 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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