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The two graphs below show the percentage of smokes and the consumption of alcohol in litres in selected countries for the period 1960 2000 Summarize the information by choosing and reporting the key features and make any relevant comparisons v.2

The two graphs below show the percentage of smokes and the consumption of alcohol in litres in selected countries for the period 1960 2000
The given first graph illustrates the proportion of smokers in USA, Japan and Holland, while the second graph provides data on the amount of alcohol, which was consumed in litre per person in Turkey, Holland and USA between 1960 and 2000. Overall, what stands ot from the graphs are that, the amount of smoker people in there countries have decreased significantly over the time period in question, whereas among the three countries, Holland and USA made up the highest consumption, followed by Turkey population representing the lowest and relatively stable. According to amount of smokers in USA, it accounted for 60% of population and trend plateau till almost 1972 before declining sharply to just 45% in 1980. By following it, the figure decreased steadily to roughly 35% in 2000. Likewise the presentage of smokers in Holland began at 50 and then there was a constant fall and the span between USA and Holland has been roughly same between 1980 and 2000. Finally, the percentage of smoker people in Japan decreased steadily from 40 to namely 20 over the span of year. Regarding to second graph, it can be seen that, the trend of Holland changed significantly, it commence at 4 litre per person and after that the figure jumped sharply and reached a pick of 12 in 1980. Next, the trend decreased slowly to 10 but this was followed by a plateau. The amount of alcohol which was consumed in USA made up 8, after which the trend increased gradually to 10, which was the highest level off it. At this point, the figure decreased gradually to 8. Finally, alcohol consumption in Turkey was remarkably low and the result was the almost same to around 1 the time period covered by the graph.
The
given
first
graph
illustrates the proportion of smokers
in USA
, Japan and Holland, while the second
graph
provides data on the
amount
of alcohol, which
was consumed
in
litre
per person in Turkey, Holland and USA between 1960 and 2000.

Overall
, what
stands ot
from the
graphs
are that, the
amount
of smoker
people
in
there
countries have
decreased
significantly
over the time period in question, whereas among the three countries, Holland and USA made up the highest consumption, followed by Turkey population representing the lowest and
relatively
stable.

According to
amount
of smokers
in USA
, it accounted for 60% of population and
trend
plateau till almost 1972
before
declining
sharply
to
just
45% in 1980. By following it, the figure
decreased
steadily
to roughly 35% in 2000.
Likewise
the
presentage
of smokers in Holland began at 50 and then there was a constant fall and the span
between USA
and Holland has been roughly same between 1980 and 2000.
Finally
, the percentage of smoker
people
in Japan
decreased
steadily
from 40 to
namely
20 over the span of year.

Regarding to
second
graph
, it can be
seen
that, the
trend
of Holland
changed
significantly
, it
commence
at 4
litre
per person and after that the figure jumped
sharply
and reached a pick of 12 in 1980.
Next
, the
trend
decreased
slowly
to 10
but
this
was followed
by a plateau. The
amount
of alcohol which
was consumed
in USA
made up 8, after which the
trend
increased
gradually
to 10, which was the highest level off it. At this point, the figure
decreased
gradually
to 8.
Finally
, alcohol consumption in Turkey was
remarkably
low and the result was the almost same to around 1 the time period covered by the
graph
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS academic The two graphs below show the percentage of smokes and the consumption of alcohol in litres in selected countries for the period 1960 2000

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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