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The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. v.2

The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. v. 2
The two pie charts represent how spending habits varied in the US between two time periods, 1971 and 2001. In total the amount of money spent on food, petrol, furniture and books in 1971 decreased over the period. By contrast, money spent on cars, restaurants and computers increased. Money spent on cars and food showed the most significant changes. The other items varied less significantly in terms of expenditure over time. Money spent on food changed the most over the 30 year time period, decreasing by 30% from 1971 to 2001. In contrast to decreased expenditure on food, money spent on cars increased by 21% a substantial difference. The next biggest change was with regards to money spent on computers which increase by 10% over the three decades. In addition, money spent on eating out at restaurants doubled from 7% to 14%. Finally, banks decreased by 5% and furniture decreased very slightly by1% from 1971 to 2001. In summary, expenditure in the United States over the three decade period differed between the various items with food and cars showing the greatest variance
The two pie charts represent how spending habits varied in the US between two time
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periods
, 1971 and 2001.

In total the amount of
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money
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spent
on
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food
, petrol, furniture and books in 1971
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decreased
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over
the
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period
. By contrast,
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money
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spent
on
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cars
, restaurants and computers increased.
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Money
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spent
on
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cars
and
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food
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showed
the most significant
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changes
. The other items varied less
significantly
in terms of expenditure
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over
time.

Money
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spent
on
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food
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changed
the most
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over
the
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30 year
time
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period
, decreasing by 30% from 1971 to 2001.
In contrast
to
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decreased
expenditure on
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food
,
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money
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spent
on
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cars
increased by 21% a substantial difference. The
next
biggest
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change
was
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with regards to
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money
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spent
on computers which increase by 10%
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over
the three decades.
In addition
,
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money
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spent
on eating out at restaurants doubled from 7% to 14%.

Finally
, banks
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decreased
by 5% and furniture
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decreased
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very
slightly
by1% from 1971 to 2001.

In summary, expenditure in the United States
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over
the three decade
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period
differed between the various items with
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food
and
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cars
showing the greatest variance
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. v. 2

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
181 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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