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The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. v.2

The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. v. 2
The graphs present data about working hours of different professionals and the percentage of employees experience stress-related issues. Overall, businessmen work longer hours on an average and the stress-related illness among teachers are highest. As is presented in the bar graph, businessmen work 70 hours per week, the highest, among the average working hours of given professionals. Movie producers work 60 hours per week, which is the second highest. The third longest working hours per weeks are for Doctors and they work more than 50 hours per week. Writers, programmers, lawyers and chefs work 47, 40, 37 and 30 hours per week consecutively. The least working hours are for lecturers, 28 hours a week. Interestingly, though the lecturers work fewer hours per week than other professionals, their stress-related sickness is higher than other experts. On an average, one-fourth teachers have this problem. Movie producers and doctors have 18 and 15 percentage anxiety issues consecutively. Though businessmen work longer hours a week, their percentage of stress-related ailment is only 10%, lesser than the lecturers, movie producers and doctors. Programmers, writer and lawyers suffer this issue less than 10% of the total.
The graphs present data about
working
hours
of
different
professionals and the percentage of employees experience
stress
-related issues.
Overall
, businessmen
work
longer
hours
on an average and the
stress
-related illness among teachers are highest.

As
is presented
in the bar graph, businessmen
work
70
hours
per
week
, the highest, among the average
working
hours
of
given
professionals. Movie producers
work
60
hours
per
week
, which is the second highest. The third longest
working
hours
per
weeks
are for
Doctors and
they
work
more than 50
hours
per
week
. Writers, programmers, lawyers and chefs
work
47, 40, 37 and 30
hours
per
week
consecutively
. The least
working
hours
are for lecturers, 28
hours
a week.

Interestingly
, though the lecturers
work
fewer
hours
per
week
than other professionals, their
stress
-related sickness is higher than other experts. On an average, one-fourth teachers have this problem. Movie producers and doctors have 18 and 15 percentage anxiety issues
consecutively
. Though businessmen
work
longer
hours
a
week
, their percentage of
stress
-related ailment is
only
10%, lesser than the lecturers, movie producers and doctors. Programmers, writer and lawyers suffer this issue less than 10% of the total.
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IELTS academic The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. v. 2

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