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The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. v.1

The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. v. 1
The illustration delineates average working hours of eight types of professionals and the percentages of them suffering from stress-related problems. Overall, despite extended working hours, business owners have fewer anxiety issues while this is highest among the teachers, who works considerably fewer hours per day. As the data suggests, businessmen work roughly 70 hours a week, higher than any other professional. Despite this longer professional engagement, their percentage of work-stress issues is lower, 11% to be precise. Doctors and movie producers both work more than 10 hours per day and their percentages of illness from work pressure account for 15 and 18 percent respectively. Writers and programmers have considerably fewer stress issues despite their more office duration than chefs, who work for only 30 hours per week but constitute 10% patients with stress-related problems. It is worth noticing that, one in four lecturers suffers from stress-related sicknesses though their working hours per week is the lowest, only 25 hours. This signifies that illness from stress from professional engagement is not directly related to the working hours of these professionals.
The illustration delineates average
working
hours
of eight types of
professionals
and the percentages of them suffering from
stress
-related problems.
Overall
, despite extended
working
hours
, business owners have fewer anxiety issues while this is highest among the teachers, who works
considerably
fewer
hours
per day.

As the data suggests, businessmen
work
roughly 70
hours
a week, higher than any other
professional
. Despite this longer
professional
engagement, their percentage of work-
stress
issues is lower, 11% to be precise. Doctors and movie producers both
work
more than 10
hours
per day and their percentages of illness from
work
pressure account for 15 and 18 percent
respectively
. Writers and programmers have
considerably
fewer
stress
issues despite their more office duration than chefs, who
work
for
only
30
hours
per week
but
constitute 10% patients with
stress
-related problems. It is worth noticing that, one in four lecturers suffers from
stress
-related sicknesses though their
working
hours
per week is the lowest,
only
25
hours
. This signifies that illness from
stress
from
professional
engagement is not
directly
related to the
working
hours
of these
professionals
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. v. 1

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179 words
6.0
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