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The graphs give information about computer ownership as a [percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. v.2

The graphs give information about computer ownership as a [percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. v. 2
The Bar chart illustrates the proportion of population in computer ownership and level of education for over eight years of period. It is clear that the computer ownership had significantly increased the percentage of population up to the last year. While the postgraduate qualification was the highest rate of population in computer ownership by level in education. Firstly, computer ownership for the past eight years had steadily increased from below around 60% to above 60% of the population. By education level postgraduate qualification had around 90% population owners of computer in 2010. It was followed by bachelor' s degree with approximately 80% of the population. While the least proportion of computer ownership were college (incomplete), high school and no high school diploma for about less than 70% in 2010. In contrast, the least percentage of computer ownership were no high school diploma and high school graduate around below 40%. However, the college level rose to about more than 50%. While it continuously increased the population of computer ownership in bachelor' s degree for about 70%. Postgraduate qualification was the highest computer ownership accounted for around more than 70% in 2002, respectively.
The Bar chart illustrates the proportion of
population
in computer
ownership
and
level
of education for over eight years of period.

It is
clear
that the computer
ownership
had
significantly
increased the percentage of
population
up to the last year.
While
the postgraduate qualification was the highest rate of
population
in computer
ownership
by
level
in education.

Firstly
, computer
ownership
for the past eight years had
steadily
increased from below
around
60% to above 60% of the
population
. By education
level
postgraduate qualification had
around
90%
population
owners of computer in 2010. It
was followed
by
bachelor&
#039; s degree with approximately 80% of the
population
. While the least proportion of computer
ownership
were college (incomplete),
high
school
and no
high
school
diploma for about less than 70% in 2010.

In contrast
, the least percentage of computer
ownership
were no
high
school
diploma and
high
school
graduate
around
below 40%.
However
, the college
level
rose to about more than 50%. While it
continuously
increased the
population
of computer
ownership
in
bachelor&
#039; s degree for about 70%. Postgraduate qualification was the highest computer
ownership
accounted for
around
more than 70% in 2002,
respectively
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The graphs give information about computer ownership as a [percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. v. 2

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