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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. v.2

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. v. 2
The given bar graphs show data on the percentage of computer ownership from the year 2002 to 2010 both by comparison of total population and education level. As is observed from the given graphs, the computer ownership increased over the years and this ownership among the people with higher studies was higher than others. According to the first graph, more than 50% people owned computers in 2002 and this percentage kept on increasing over years. After 6 years this percentage reached to over 60% and finally in 2010 the percentage of people who owned computers reached to over 70%. From the second bar graph, we can observe that the percentage of computer ownership increased with the education level; i. e. the higher the education level the higher the percentage of computer ownership. For instance, 15% of the people who had High school graduation owned computers in 2002 and this percentage were about 60 for Bachelor degree holders and over 80 for the postgraduate degree holders. After 8 years, in 2010, the same trend could be observed and the percentage of people who owned computers increased significantly compared to 2002.
The
given
bar
graphs
show
data on the
percentage
of computer
ownership
from the
year
2002 to 2010 both by comparison of total population and education level. As
is observed
from the
given
graphs
, the computer
ownership
increased
over
the years and this
ownership
among the
people
with higher studies was higher than others.

According to the
first
graph
, more than 50%
people
owned
computers in 2002 and this
percentage
kept
on increasing
over
years. After 6 years this
percentage
reached to
over
60% and
finally
in 2010 the
percentage
of
people
who
owned
computers reached to
over
70%.

From the second bar
graph
, we can observe that the
percentage
of computer
ownership
increased with the education level;
i. e.
the higher the education level the higher the
percentage
of computer
ownership
.
For instance
, 15% of the
people
who had High school graduation
owned
computers in 2002 and this
percentage
were about 60 for Bachelor degree holders and
over
80 for the postgraduate degree holders. After 8 years, in 2010, the same trend could
be observed
and the
percentage
of
people
who
owned
computers increased
significantly
compared to 2002.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. v. 2

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6.5
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