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The given line chart demonstrates the consumption of three spreads, during the period of 1981 to 2007. v.2

The given line chart demonstrates the consumption of three spreads, during the period of 1981 to 2007. v. 2
The given line chart demonstrates the consumption of three spreads, during the period of 1981 to 2007. Overall, it is evident from the figure that the consumption of Butter increased till 1986, then after it started falling drastically while the usage of Margarine dropped till 1986 and then trend went upward for some period but after that, it started dipping significantly. Another noticeable thing was the consumption of Lowfat & reduced spreads increased in between from 1996 to 2001 and then it went down. Firstly, the usage of Butter from approximately 145 grams in 1981 to 155 grams in 1986, thereafter it plunged rapidly till 2007 and settled finally to 50 grams. Additionally, the usage of Margarine went down moderately from 1981 to 1986, from 90 grams to 80 grams respectively. After 1986, though it showed recovery and remained flat for some duration past 1996 it started to fall. Turning to the consumption of Lowfat and reduced spreads its consumption was visible after 1996 at 10 grams and it was growing till 2001 but this trend reversed after this period, as thereafter it rested at 70 grams in 2007 compared to 85 grams in 2001.
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line chart demonstrates the
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of three spreads, during the period of 1981 to 2007.

Overall
, it is evident from the figure that the
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consumption
of Butter increased till 1986, then after it
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started
falling
drastically
while the usage of Margarine dropped till 1986 and then trend went upward for
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some
period
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but
after that, it
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started
dipping
significantly
. Another noticeable thing was the
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consumption
of
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Lowfat
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;
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reduced
spreads increased in between from 1996 to 2001 and then it went down.

Firstly
, the usage of Butter from approximately 145
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grams
in 1981 to 155
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grams
in 1986, thereafter it plunged
rapidly
till 2007 and settled
finally
to 50
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grams
.
Additionally
, the usage of Margarine went down
moderately
from 1981 to 1986, from 90
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grams
to 80
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grams
respectively
. After 1986, though it
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showed
recovery and remained flat for
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some
duration past 1996 it
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started
to fall.

Turning to the
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consumption
of
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Lowfat
and
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reduced
spreads its
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consumption
was visible after 1996 at 10
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grams
and it was growing till 2001
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but
this trend reversed after this period, as thereafter it rested at 70
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grams
in 2007 compared to 85
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grams
in 2001.
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13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The given line chart demonstrates the consumption of three spreads, during the period of 1981 to 2007. v. 2

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195 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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