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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where r v.2

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.
The table compares the prevalence of various means that were adopted by schoolers aged 5-12 in a country in the year of 1990 and 2010. All in all, the data differ significantly. As shown in the information of 1990, the majority of junior learners in this country chose to walk to school in this period, reaching over a staggering 12 million trips per year. By contrast, transportation entailing bus and cycling, as well as a blended utilisation of bus and walking accounted for a practically identical number of 6 million trips, which was approximately half of that of pure walking. Likewise, the number of commute between home and school conducted by car passenger was also rather modest, registering a merely 4 million in 1990. In stark contrast, this country, however, saw a dominant prevalence in the use of car in 2010. With a doubled climb, approximately 11 million trips were performed on car, while other means for travelling from and to school saw a significant drop in their compositions. In fact, having undergone a dramatic decline in two decades, bikes were used in 2 million trips only in 2010 Overall, at the time of 2010, car was surpassing other means of commute among students of play age.
The table compares the prevalence of various means that
were adopted
by schoolers aged 5-12 in a country in the year of 1990 and 2010. All in all, the data differ
significantly
.

As shown in the information of 1990, the majority of junior learners in this country chose to walk to school in this period, reaching over a staggering 12
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trips
per year. By contrast, transportation entailing bus and cycling,
as well
as a blended
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utilisation
of bus and walking accounted for a
practically
identical number of 6
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million
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trips
, which was approximately half of that of pure walking.
Likewise
, the number of commute between home and school conducted by
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car
passenger was
also
rather
modest, registering a
merely
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million
in 1990.

In stark contrast, this country,
however
,
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saw
a dominant prevalence in the
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use
of
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car
in 2010. With a doubled climb, approximately 11
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million
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trips
were performed
on
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car
, while other means for travelling from and to school
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saw
a significant drop in their compositions. In fact, having undergone a dramatic decline in two decades, bikes were
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used
in 2
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million
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trips
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only
in 2010

Overall
, at the time of 2010,
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car
was surpassing other means of commute among students of play age.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

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