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The graphs below show the post-school qualifications held by Australians in the age groups 25 to 34 and 55 to 69. v.2

The graphs below show the post-school qualifications held by Australians in the age groups 25 to 34 and 55 to 69. v. 2
The two pie charts represent the post-school qualifications of groups between 25-34 and 55-69, it is categorised into 10 sectors. Before we start, we can look up that Social science and Arts are top ranked among the both generations. To begin with, Administration follow by social science and arts in the generations. On the contrary, architecture and medicine decreased with younger one. Compare with that, older graduates slightly drop by 1. 5% at architecture and 4% at medicine. However, the biggest decline with engineering is from 19% to 9. 36%. Main subjects; science, maths and computers are quiet raised in between 20s graduates. Additionally, education has minor rises with 1% and adminstration lead a moderate growth with the percentage of nearly 5%. In conclusion, the demand of social science and arts are mainly preferrable according to the post-school qualified license which is held in Australia. Also, each age groups has some of the similarities per subjects.
The two pie charts represent the post-school qualifications of groups between 25-34 and 55-69, it is
categorised
into 10 sectors.
Before
we
start
, we can look up that Social
science
and Arts are top ranked among the both generations.

To
begin
with, Administration
follow
by social
science
and arts in the generations.
On the contrary
, architecture and medicine decreased with younger one. Compare with that, older graduates
slightly
drop by 1. 5% at architecture and 4% at medicine.
However
, the biggest decline with engineering is from 19% to 9. 36%. Main subjects;
science
,
maths
and computers are quiet raised in between 20s graduates.
Additionally
, education has minor rises with 1% and
adminstration
lead a moderate growth with the percentage of
nearly
5%.

In conclusion
, the demand of social
science
and arts are
mainly
preferrable
according to the post-school qualified license which
is held
in Australia.
Also
, each age groups has
some of the
similarities per subjects.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic The graphs below show the post-school qualifications held by Australians in the age groups 25 to 34 and 55 to 69. v. 2

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6.0
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