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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. v.1

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. v. 1
The bar graph compares post-school qualification in Australia based on gender for the year 1999. Generally speaking, more male achieved their post-school degrees in skilled vocational diploma, Masters degree and postgraduate diploma than females did while for more female, the highest educational qualification was undergraduate diploma and Bachelor's degree. According to the data, Australian male and female who achieved their post-school degrees in 1999 were classified into five categories. 'Female post-school qualified' surpassed their male counterpart in undergraduate diploma and bachelor’s degree as they a smaller ratio of females attended post-graduation courses. For the undergraduate diploma, the percentage of females was 70% compared to the only 35% male. Male were predominating in percentage when it comes to master’s degree, postgraduate diploma and skilled vocational diploma. 90% male completed skilled vocational diploma and the remaining 10% was female. It is worth noticing that, though many females completed their bachelor degree, the percentage decreased in masters degree level whereas 60% male completed it.
The bar graph compares post-school qualification in Australia based on gender for the year 1999.
Generally
speaking, more male achieved their post-school
degrees
in skilled vocational
diploma
,
Masters
degree
and postgraduate
diploma
than
females
did while for more
female
, the highest educational qualification was undergraduate
diploma
and Bachelor's degree.

According to the data, Australian male and
female
who achieved their post-school
degrees
in 1999
were classified
into five categories. 'Female post-school qualified' surpassed their male counterpart in undergraduate
diploma
and bachelor’s
degree
as they a smaller ratio of
females
attended post-graduation courses. For the undergraduate
diploma
, the percentage of
females
was 70% compared to the
only
35% male. Male were predominating in percentage when it
comes
to master’s
degree
, postgraduate
diploma
and skilled vocational
diploma
. 90% male completed skilled vocational
diploma
and the remaining 10% was
female
. It is worth noticing that, though
many
females
completed their bachelor
degree
, the percentage decreased in
masters
degree
level whereas 60% male completed it.
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