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The charts below gives information about number of road accidents in Someland between 1983 1995 Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below Write at least 150 words v.2

The charts below gives information about number of road accidents in Someland between 1983 1995 Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below v. 2
The graph illustrates the figure for road accidents which occurred in Someland over a period of 12 years from 1983. It can be clearly seen that there was a reduction in the figure for road accidents from 1983 to 1995. In the period 1983 – 1984, the figure for road accidents remained constant over 4 million of accidents before going through a significant growth of 2. 6 million of accidents and reached the highest point of 6. 8 million of accidents in 1986. The figure for road accidents declined sharply from 6. 8 million to 3. 2 million of accidents, which was followed by a fluctuation around 3. 5 million of accident between 1987 and 1992, In this period, the figure for road accidents hit the lowest point of 2. 8 million of accidents in 1991. The figure for road accidents experienced a substantial decrease from 4 million to 3 million of accidents between 1992 to 1995.
The graph illustrates the
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Someland
over a period of 12 years from 1983.

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that there was a reduction in the
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accidents
from 1983 to 1995.

In the period 1983 – 1984, the
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remained constant over 4
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going through a significant growth of 2. 6
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and reached the highest point of 6. 8
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in 1986. The
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declined
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to 3. 2
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between 1987 and 1992, In this period, the
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hit the lowest point of 2. 8
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in 1991.

The
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experienced a substantial decrease from 4
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Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 1992 and 1995".
between 1992 to 1995
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IELTS academic The charts below gives information about number of road accidents in Someland between 1983 1995 Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below v. 2

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4 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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