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The chart shows the different levels of post school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. v.2

The chart shows the different levels of post school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. v. 2
The chart depicts the post qualifications in terms of the different levels of further education reached by men and women in Australia in 1999. Units are measured in percentage. Overall, skill vocational diploma, postgraduate diploma and master' s degree had been shown highest portion by females, while undergraduate diploma and bachelor' s degree percentage scored by males, however there were few fluctuations had by both genders. It is clear that, in Australia in 1999, the skill vocational diploma was being raised significantly by females, which was over 90%, before falling by 20% in postgraduate diploma which was almost equal men in undergraduate diploma (70%). Then about 60% of women studied in master' s degree but males 20% less interested in this education winch was 40%. In contrast, 70% of boys were being qualified more in undergraduate diploma but girls ratio was almost half of this percentage ( around 35%), and in Bachelor' s degree just 5% less than men. It is noticeable that, under 10% of the proportion seen by males qualified in skilled vocational diploma.
The chart depicts the post qualifications in terms of the
different
levels of
further
education reached by
men
and women in Australia in 1999. Units
are measured
in percentage.

Overall
,
skill
vocational
diploma
, postgraduate
diploma
and
master&
#039; s
degree
had
been shown
highest
portion by females, while undergraduate
diploma
and
bachelor&
#039; s
degree
percentage scored by males,
however
there were few fluctuations had by both genders.

It is
clear
that, in Australia in 1999, the
skill
vocational
diploma
was
being raised
significantly
by females, which was over 90%,
before
falling by 20% in postgraduate
diploma
which was almost equal
men
in undergraduate
diploma
(70%). Then about 60% of women studied in
master&
#039; s
degree
but
males 20% less interested in this education winch was 40%.

In contrast
, 70% of boys were
being qualified
more in undergraduate
diploma
but
girls ratio was almost half of this percentage
(
around 35%), and in
Bachelor&
#039; s
degree
just
5% less than
men
. It is noticeable that, under 10% of the proportion
seen
by males qualified in skilled vocational
diploma
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart shows the different levels of post school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. v. 2

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