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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. v.2

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. v. 2
The bar chart compares post-school educational attainment among men and women in Australia in 1999. As a whole, men were ahead of women in terms of their highest educational qualifications in Australia, and three out of five types of post-school educational qualifications, namely - post-graduate diploma, skilled vocational diploma and masters degree, were mostly attended by men. In details, those who had a post-graduate diploma and Master's degree were dominated by 70% and 60% men respectively. The ratio of women who had post-graduation qualification was much lower. Another important aspect of the graph is that there was a remarkable number of men, 90%, who took up a 'skilled vocational diploma course' which left women to only just a tenth. Since men continued their education and achieved post-graduate qualifications, females with an undergraduate diploma much outweighed the ratio of males. Finally, the proportion of male whose highest education was a bachelor's degree was about 45%, whereas the females' ratio was somewhat more than that.
The bar chart compares post-school educational attainment among
men
and
women
in Australia in 1999.

As a whole,
men
were ahead of
women
in terms of their highest educational
qualifications
in Australia, and three out of five types of post-school educational
qualifications
,
namely
-
post-graduate
diploma
, skilled vocational
diploma
and
masters
degree, were
mostly
attended by
men
.

In
details
, those who had a post-graduate
diploma
and Master's degree
were dominated
by 70% and 60%
men
respectively
. The ratio of
women
who had post-graduation
qualification
was much lower. Another
important
aspect of the graph is that there was a remarkable number of
men
, 90%, who took up a 'skilled vocational
diploma
course' which
left
women
to
only
just
a tenth. Since
men
continued their education and achieved post-graduate
qualifications
, females with an undergraduate
diploma
much outweighed the ratio of males.
Finally
, the proportion of male whose highest education was a bachelor's degree was about 45%, whereas the females' ratio was somewhat more than that.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. v. 2

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