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The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy. v.4

The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy. v. 4
The bar graph illustrates the expenditure on health and education sectors in the UAE, measured as the percentage of GDP, in three different years- 1985, 1990 and 1994 while the line graph demonstrates child mortality and life expectancy from 1970 to 1992. According to the diagram, investment in both health and education in the UAE grew over the time and infant mortality and life expectancy scenario improved. As is presented, expense on public health in 1985 was nearly 8% of the GDP in the UAE, whereas it slightly decreased half a decade later. In 1993, however, the healthcare expense made up 10% of the total GDP. Education expenditure rose constantly from 1985 to 1993 and UAE’s expenditure in education was higher than that of healthcare. In 1985, one-tenth GDP went on the education sector and it grew as high as 15% after 8 years. The line graph shows the infant mortality rates and citizens’ life expectancy between 1970 and 1992. It is evident that child death rate noticeably declined during the period from 70 deaths per thousand in 1970 to 20 per thousand is a great improvement indeed. Consequently, people’s life expectancy rose from 60 years to 70 years in just 22 years.
The bar graph illustrates the expenditure on health and
education
sectors in the UAE, measured as the percentage of GDP, in three
different
years- 1985, 1990 and 1994 while the line graph demonstrates child mortality and
life
expectancy from 1970 to 1992. According to the diagram, investment in both health and
education
in the UAE grew over the time and infant mortality and
life
expectancy scenario
improved
.

As
is presented
, expense on public health in 1985 was
nearly
8% of the GDP in the UAE, whereas it
slightly
decreased half a decade later. In 1993,
however
, the healthcare expense made up 10% of the total GDP.
Education
expenditure rose
constantly
from 1985 to 1993 and UAE’s expenditure in
education
was higher than that of healthcare. In 1985, one-tenth GDP went on the
education
sector and it grew as high as 15% after 8 years.

The line graph
shows
the infant mortality rates and citizens’
life
expectancy between 1970 and 1992. It is evident that child death rate
noticeably
declined during the period from 70 deaths per thousand in 1970 to 20 per thousand is a great improvement
indeed
.
Consequently
,
people
’s
life
expectancy rose from 60 years to 70 years in
just
22 years.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy. v. 4

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