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The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy. v.1

The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy. v. 1
The bar graph indicates the expenditure ratio of the UAE government in education and healthcare between 1985 and 1993, whereas the line graph compares life expectancy and infant mortality rate in the UAE in 1970 with that of 1992. Overall, UAE administrator spent more ratio of their budget on education than they did on health care. The improvement Emiratis achieved to prevent child death cases was remarkable. As the bar chart suggests, the UAE administration spent one-tenth of their GDP in the health sector in 1985 and their spending on public health was roughly 2% lower than that. After 5 years, 14% of GDP went on education which was almost double than the expenditure in health division. Interestingly, the UAE authority spent less ratio of their GDP in public health in 1990 than they did in 1985 but it went up to 10% in 1993. The funds for education went as high as nearly 15% in 1993. The line graph delineates that Emiratis people’s life expectancy was 60 years in 1970 and it was extended to just over 70 years after two decades. Infant mortality rate, on the other hand, was quite high in 1970 (70 child death in every thousand) and it improved significantly during 22 years when it went as low as 20 per thousand.
The bar graph indicates the expenditure ratio of the UAE
government
in
education
and healthcare between 1985 and 1993, whereas the line graph compares life expectancy and infant mortality rate in the UAE in 1970 with that of 1992.
Overall
, UAE administrator spent more ratio of their budget on
education
than they did on
health
care. The improvement
Emiratis
achieved to
prevent
child death cases was remarkable.

As the bar chart suggests, the UAE administration spent one-tenth of their GDP in the
health
sector in 1985 and their spending on public
health
was roughly 2% lower than that. After 5 years, 14% of GDP
went
on
education
which was almost
double
than the expenditure in
health
division.
Interestingly
, the UAE authority spent less ratio of their GDP in public
health
in 1990 than they did in 1985
but
it
went
up to 10% in 1993. The funds for
education
went
as high as
nearly
15% in 1993.

The line graph delineates that
Emiratis
people
’s life expectancy was 60 years in 1970 and it
was extended
to
just
over 70 years after two decades. Infant mortality rate,
on the other hand
, was quite high in 1970 (70 child death in every thousand) and it
improved
significantly
during 22 years when it
went
as low as 20 per thousand.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy. v. 1

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