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The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK. v.2

The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK. v. 2
The column graph compares how much money British citizens with different economic status spent on three fast food items in 1990. Overall, high and average income class British spent more amount on hamburgers and low-income class preferred to eat fish & chips as their spending pattern suggests. As is presented in the diagram, rich people spent the highest amount on purchasing hamburgers, around 47 million Pounds, and their expenses for fish & chips and pizza were between 17 to 19 million. Interestingly, Average-income class spent more money on fish & chips than rich customers did. They spent exactly 25 millions on fish & chips though their highest amount went on hamburgers, roughly 33 million. Though rich British spent more on pizza than that of fish & ships, average-income class in Britain did the opposite. Finally, low-income class people spent a considerably fewer amount on fast food and their most preferred item was fish & chips for which they spent around 17 million Pound. Their spending on hamburgers was less than 15 million while they spent the least amount on pizza, which amounted to nearly 7 million Pounds.
The column graph compares how much money British citizens with
different
economic status
spent
on three
fast
food items in 1990.
Overall
, high and average income
class
British
spent
more
amount
on hamburgers and low-income
class
preferred to eat fish & chips as their spending pattern suggests.

As
is presented
in the diagram, rich
people
spent
the highest
amount
on purchasing hamburgers, around 47
million
Pounds, and their expenses for fish & chips and pizza were
between 17 to 19
million
.
Interestingly
, Average-income
class
spent
more money on fish & chips than rich customers did. They
spent
exactly 25
millions
on fish & chips though their highest
amount
went on hamburgers, roughly 33
million
. Though rich British
spent
more on pizza than that of fish & ships, average-income
class
in Britain did the opposite.
Finally
, low-income
class
people
spent
a
considerably
fewer
amount
on
fast
food and their most preferred item was fish & chips for which they
spent
around 17
million
Pound. Their spending on hamburgers was less than 15
million
while they
spent
the least
amount
on pizza, which amounted to
nearly
7
million
Pounds.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK. v. 2

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