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The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy. v.2

The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy. v. 2
The graphs show the ratio of GDP spent on health and education sectors in the UAE from 1985 to 1993 and it also presents the infant mortality and life expectancy rates of this country from 1970 to 1992. According to the bar chart, the UAE administrator spent around 8% on health care and 10% on the education of their total GDP. After 5 years, the expenditure on health decreased slightly while the expenditure on education increased by 4%. Finally, in 1993, the amount spent on both sectors grew and reached to 10% of GDP on healthcare and over 14% on education. As depicted in the line graph, the life expectancy in the UAE was 60 years in 1970 while the infant mortality rate was 70 per thousand. After 22 years, both of these conditions improved and the life expectancy extended to 71 years while the infant mortality rate declined to 20 per thousand. In summary, the UAE's budget for health and education sector increased over the period and as a result, the infant mortality rate reduced and the life expectancy improved.
The graphs
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the ratio of GDP spent on
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health
and
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education
sectors in the UAE from 1985 to 1993 and it
also
presents the
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infant
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mortality
and
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life
expectancy
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rates
of this country from 1970 to 1992.

According to the bar chart, the UAE administrator spent around 8% on
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health
care and 10% on the
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education
of their total GDP. After 5 years, the expenditure on
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health
decreased
slightly
while the expenditure on
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education
increased by 4%.
Finally
, in 1993, the amount spent on both sectors grew and reached to 10% of GDP on healthcare and over 14% on education.

As depicted in the line graph, the
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life
expectancy in the UAE was 60 years in 1970 while the
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infant
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mortality
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rate
was 70 per thousand. After 22 years, both of these conditions
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improved
and the
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life
expectancy extended to 71 years while the
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infant
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mortality
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rate
declined to 20 per thousand.

In summary, the UAE's budget for
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health
and
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education
sector increased over the period and
as a result
, the
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infant
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mortality
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rate
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reduced
and the
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life
expectancy
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improved
.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy. v. 2

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