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The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK. v.3

The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK. v. 3
The given bar graph shows data on the expenses made by the United Kingdom citizens for the fast food item in 1990. As is observed from the given data, people with high-income group spent more money on fast foods and the hamburger was the most preferred food among the high and average earning people. According to the bar graph, the people who had high income did the maximum expense on the fast food items. Hamburger was the most preferred fast food items both for the average and high earning group people. More than 40 million pounds was expensed by the high earning people in this single fast food items. Two other popular fast food items among the high earning people were Pizza and Fish/ Chips for which the high earners expensed more than 15 million pounds in 1990. Among the average earning people, the second most favourite fast food item was fish/ chips for which they made an expense of 25 million pounds in this year. On the other hand, Pizza was the least popular item among the people of low income and they preferred fish/ chips and hamburger over the pizza.
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shows
data on the expenses made by the United Kingdom citizens for the
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fast
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food
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item
in 1990. As
is observed
from the
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given
data,
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people
with high-income group spent more money on
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fast
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foods
and the hamburger was the most preferred
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food
among the
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high
and average
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earning
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people
.

According to the bar graph, the
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people
who had
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high
income did the maximum expense on the
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fast
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food
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items
. Hamburger was the most preferred
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fast
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food
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items
both for the average and
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high
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earning
group
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people
. More than 40 million pounds
was expensed
by the
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high
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earning
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people
in this single
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fast
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food
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items
. Two other popular
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fast
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food
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items
among the
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high
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earning
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people
were Pizza and Fish/ Chips for which the
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high
earners expensed more than 15 million pounds in 1990.

Among the average
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earning
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people
, the second most
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favourite
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fast
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food
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item
was fish/ chips for which they made an expense of 25 million pounds in this year.
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, Pizza was the least popular
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item
among the
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people
of low
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income and
they preferred fish/ chips and hamburger over the pizza.
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40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK. v. 3

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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