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The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK. v.4

The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK. v. 4
The given bar graph compares the British expenditure on fast food based on the citizens’ income class in 1990. As is seen from the given illustration, high-income class British spent more on fast food items and the hamburger was their preferred item. As is clear from the given diagram, high-income class British citizens spent more on fast food in 1990 than the average and low-income class citizens. High-income class people spent more than 40% on hamburger which is just over 30% for average income class and below 15% for low-income class. Interestingly average income class spent more on fish & chips and that shows that it is their favourite fast food item. They spend one-fourth of their total fast-food expenses on fish & chips while it was just above 15% both for the two other income classes. It is obvious that fish and chips are also popular among the low-income class as they spend their highest percentage on this item. Finally, the high-income class spent the highest amount on the pizza which was just below 20%. The pizza was least popular among the low and average income class British.
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bar graph compares the British expenditure on
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food
based on the citizens’
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income
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class
in 1990. As is
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seen
from the
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given
illustration,
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high-income
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class
British
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spent
more on
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fast
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food
items and the hamburger was their preferred item.

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clear
from the
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diagram,
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high-income
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class
British citizens
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spent
more on
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fast
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food
in 1990 than the
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average
and low-income
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class
citizens.
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High-income
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class
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people
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spent
more than 40% on hamburger which is
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over 30% for
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average
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income
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class
and below 15% for low-income
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class
.
Interestingly
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income
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class
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spent
more on fish & chips and that
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that it is their
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fast
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food
item. They spend one-fourth of their total
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-food expenses on fish & chips while it was
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above 15% both for the two other
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income
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classes
. It is obvious that fish and chips are
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popular among the low-income
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class
as they spend their highest percentage on this item.
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, the
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high-income
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class
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the highest amount on the pizza which was
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below 20%. The pizza was least popular among the low and
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average
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income
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class
British.
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IELTS academic The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK. v. 4

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2 paragraphs
189 words
6.0
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