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The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy. v.3

The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy. v. 3
The bar graph compares the UAE government’s expenditures on health and education sectors in three different years with a 5 years gap while the line graph shows the infant mortality rate and citizens' life expectancy from 1970 to 1992. As is evident, the UAE government spent more on healthcare and education in 1990 than they did in the past while citizens’ life expectancy enhanced along with declining the infant mortality rate. As is given in the diagrams, the UAE government spent less than 8% of their GDP on healthcare in 1985 and just 10% on education. After 5 years, the spending on healthcare decreased slightly but increased dramatically in the education sector. In the final year, both sectors got priority and the spending on health sector increased to 10% while it was about 15% of the GDP in education. The line graph represents that the percentage of spending in the UAE had a direct impact on their citizens’ life expectancy and infant's mortality rate. While the life expectancy in the UAE was just 60 years in 1970, it increased to over 70 in 1992. On the other hand, the infant mortality rate decreased to just 20% in 1992 from the astonishing 70% in 1970.
The bar graph compares the UAE
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education
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sectors
in three
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years with a 5 years gap while the line graph
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the infant
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rate and citizens'
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expectancy from 1970 to 1992. As is evident, the UAE
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spent more on healthcare and
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education
in 1990 than they did in the past while citizens’
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expectancy enhanced along with declining the infant
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As is
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in the diagrams, the UAE
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spent less than 8% of their GDP on healthcare in 1985 and
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10% on
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education
. After 5 years, the spending on healthcare decreased
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increased
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education
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. In the final
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, both
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sectors
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priority and the spending on health
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increased to 10% while it was about 15% of the GDP in education.

The line graph represents that the percentage of spending in the UAE had a direct impact on their citizens’
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expectancy and infant's
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mortality
rate. While the
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expectancy in the UAE was
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60 years in 1970, it increased to over 70 in 1992.
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rate decreased to
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20% in 1992 from the astonishing 70% in 1970.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy. v. 3

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