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The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. v.1

The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. v. 1
A glance at the two figures provided reveals the popularity of various forms of cosmetic surgery among Korean men and women in 2004. Not surprisingly, plastic surgery enjoyed widespread popularity among women. By far the most common forms of cosmetic procedure for this group, eyelid surgery and Rhinoplasty were performed a staggering 320, 000 and 275, 000 times respectively. Third in terms of popularity, meanwhile, was laser skin resurfacing. An approximate 215, 000 of these procedures were conducted on women during the year in question. Breast enlargement and liposuction were considerably less common, at 145, 000 and 120, 000 operations respectively. Equally predictable is the fact that plastic surgery was far less popular among men. In contrast to women, hair transplantation was the most common cosmetic procedure. There were just 60, 000 of these operations among Korean males. Numbering some 55, 000 procedures, laser skin resurfacing was second for this group. Third was Rhinoplasty, at approximately 40, 000 operations. Finally, a relatively small 19, 000 Abdominoplasty and 14, 000 facelift procedures were carried out on men during 2004. Also noteworthy is the fact that hair transplantation, Abdominoplasty and facelift patients  were exclusively male, while 100 percent of liposuction, breast enlargement and eyelid surgery patients were female.
A glance at the two figures provided reveals the popularity of various forms of cosmetic surgery among Korean
men
and
women
in 2004.

Not
surprisingly
, plastic surgery enjoyed widespread popularity among
women
. By far the most common forms of cosmetic
procedure
for this group, eyelid surgery and Rhinoplasty
were performed
a staggering 320, 000 and 275, 000 times
respectively
. Third in terms of popularity, meanwhile, was laser skin resurfacing. An approximate 215, 000 of these
procedures
were conducted
on
women
during the year in question. Breast enlargement and liposuction were
considerably
less common, at 145, 000 and 120, 000 operations
respectively
.

Equally
predictable is the fact that plastic surgery was far less popular among
men
.
In contrast
to
women
, hair transplantation was the most common cosmetic
procedure
. There were
just
60, 000 of these operations among Korean males. Numbering
some
55, 000
procedures
, laser skin resurfacing was second for this group. Third was Rhinoplasty, at approximately 40, 000 operations.
Finally
, a
relatively
small
19, 000
Abdominoplasty
and 14, 000 facelift
procedures
were carried
out on
men
during 2004.

Also
noteworthy is the fact that hair transplantation,
Abdominoplasty
and facelift patients
 
were exclusively male, while 100 percent of liposuction, breast enlargement and eyelid surgery patients were female.
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