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The table below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities. v.1

The table below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities. v. 1
The table data illustrates how much time an average British male and female spent on various daily activities. It is apparently seen that sleeping consume the highest duration of a day while leisure and professional activities involve a notable portion of their time. Moreover, females do more house works and childrearing than males do on a daily basis. As can be seen, an average British male sleeps and rests just over 8 hours a day while female’s sleeping and resting time is slightly higher than that. A similar pattern could be observed on the duration of personal care by British. Further, a male takes an hour and 25 minutes to enjoy their meals while it is 6 minutes shorter for their counterparts. Looking further, men spend 5: 25 hours to enjoy their leisure activities while it is around 28 minutes less for females. Watching TV and enjoying music is a popular pastime activity among British as they spend over half of their leisure times on that. They spend less time reading or participating in sports than they do for watching TV and listening to music. Men spend 3 hours and 45 minutes a day for professional and academic purposes, more than females involvement on this. However, females devote more time for household works, childcare and voluntary works, roughly 4 hours, compared to almost half of that by men. Finally, British travel for nearly 1 and half hour daily and men employ slightly more time doing it than that of females.
The table data illustrates how much
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an average British male and
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female
spent on various daily
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activities
. It is
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that sleeping consume the highest duration of a day while leisure and professional
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activities
involve a notable portion of their
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.
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,
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females
do more
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works and
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childrearing
than
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do on a daily basis.

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, an average British male sleeps and rests
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over 8
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a day while
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female’s
sleeping and resting
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time
is
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higher than that. A similar pattern could
be observed
on the duration of personal care by British.
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, a male takes an
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hour
and 25 minutes to enjoy their meals while it is 6 minutes shorter for their counterparts.

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,
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men
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5: 25
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hours
to enjoy their leisure
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activities
while it is around 28 minutes less for
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females
. Watching TV and enjoying music is a popular pastime
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activity
among British as they
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spend
over half of their leisure
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on that. They
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less
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reading or participating in sports than they do for watching TV and listening to music.

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Men
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3
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and 45 minutes a day for professional and academic purposes, more than
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females
involvement on this.
However
,
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females
devote more
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for household works, childcare and voluntary works, roughly 4
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hours
, compared to almost half of that by
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men
.
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, British travel for
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hour
daily and
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employ
slightly
more
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time
doing it than that of
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females
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS academic The table below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities. v. 1

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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