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The chart below shows the rate of males and females who were overweight in Austalia from 1980 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant. v.1

The chart below shows the rate of males and females who were overweight in Austalia from 1980 to 2010.
The graph illustrates what percentages of Australia men and women overweight between 1980 to 2010. It can be seen from the chart that the percentage of Australia men steadily increased and reached the peak from around 45% to 70% in the first two decades. After that, the rate suffered a slight decrease and ended up with 68% in 2010. In terms of the figure for women, it showed the same trend as the men' s one until 2000 which increased from 30% to 50% and remained the same figure in 2010. Furthermore, in the first year, the figure for men was almost 1. 5 times for women' s figure, what is more, the men' s number in 1990 was roughly 10% more than one for women, while the male' s data in the last decade was one fifth more than female' s in the same time period. Overall, the number of overweight men was far more than one for women in Australia.
The graph illustrates what percentages of Australia
men
and
women
overweight
between 1980 to 2010
.

It can be
seen
from the chart that the percentage of Australia
men
steadily
increased and reached the peak from around 45% to 70% in the
first
two decades. After that, the rate suffered a slight decrease and ended up with 68% in 2010. In terms of the
figure
for
women
, it
showed
the same trend as the
men&
#039; s one until 2000 which increased from 30% to 50% and remained the same
figure
in 2010.

Furthermore
, in the
first
year, the
figure
for
men
was almost 1. 5 times for
women&
#039; s
figure
,
what is more
, the
men&
#039; s number in 1990 was roughly 10% more than one for
women
, while the
male&
#039; s data in the last decade was one fifth more than
female&
#039; s in the same time period.

Overall
, the number of overweight
men
was far more than one for
women
in Australia.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below shows the rate of males and females who were overweight in Austalia from 1980 to 2010.

Academic
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4 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
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