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The graph below compares figures for the production and consumption of energy in the US from 1950 to 2000. It also predicts figures for 2025. v.2

The graph below compares figures for the production and consumption of energy in the US from 1950 to 2000. It also predicts figures for 2025. v. 2
The line chart depicts the comparison between manufacturing and utilization of energy in the United States from 1950 to 2000. It also estimates trend up to 2050. Between 1950 and 1970, the rate of production, as well as consumption, surged by 30 units. However, then the exhaustion of energy was rose dramatically while the creation maintained a plateau by numerous ups and downs for 5 years. Moreover, till 2000 the difference between the production and consumption became wider, to be precise 25 units. Moving further, there was a sudden increase in the depletion of energy from 2000 to 2012 by 20 units while the mass production slowly elevated by 10 units in the given interval of time. Later, it is predicted that trend will follow the same pattern in the next decades and rocketed by 20 units of manufacturing and 10 units of exhaustion. All in all, the graph says that squandering and creation do not go hand in hand so imports are necessary to overcome this problem and to satisfy the needs.
The line chart depicts the comparison between manufacturing and utilization of energy in the United States from 1950 to 2000. It
also
estimates trend up to 2050.

Between 1950 and 1970, the rate of production,
as well
as consumption, surged by 30
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units
.
However
, then the exhaustion of energy was rose
dramatically
while the creation maintained a plateau by numerous ups and downs for 5 years.
Moreover
, till 2000 the difference between the production and consumption became wider, to be precise 25 units.

Moving
further
, there was a sudden increase in the depletion of energy from 2000 to 2012 by 20
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units
while the mass production
slowly
elevated by 10
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units
in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
interval of time. Later, it
is predicted
that trend will follow the same pattern in the
next
decades and rocketed by 20
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
units
of manufacturing and 10
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
units
of exhaustion.

All in all, the graph says that squandering and creation do not go hand in hand
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so
imports are necessary to overcome this problem and to satisfy the needs.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic The graph below compares figures for the production and consumption of energy in the US from 1950 to 2000. It also predicts figures for 2025. v. 2

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173 words
7.0
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