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The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment. v.4

The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment. v. 4
The diagram illustrates the stages involved in the production of consumer goods including the feedbacks at a specific interval. At a fleeting glance, it is clearly observed that the process is initiated with the purchase of raw materials as well as manufactured components which are further stored until the production planning. The latter provides the feedback for the former. Also, it includes product research and design. Then, the process is carried through the stages of assembly, inspection, testing and packaging sequentially which is then dispatched for the sale. Switching to the feedbacks, sales provides the feedback to production planning and market research which in turn provides reviews to advertising as well as packaging. Again, it gives remarks to design which is evaluated by testing as well. All in all, it is a value chain development process which starts from the raw materials and ends at the sale of the product, n each stage value is added to the product and proper feedback is given.
The diagram illustrates the stages involved in the production of consumer
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goods
including the
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feedbacks
at a specific interval.

At a fleeting glance, it is
clearly
observed that the process
is initiated
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
of raw materials
as well
as manufactured components which are
further
stored until the production planning. The latter provides the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feedback
for the former.
Also
, it includes product research and design. Then, the process
is carried
through the stages of assembly, inspection, testing and packaging
sequentially
which is then dispatched for the sale.

Switching to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feedbacks
, sales provides the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feedback
to production planning and market research which in turn provides reviews to advertising
as well
as packaging. Again, it gives remarks to design which
is evaluated
by testing
as well
.

All in all, it is a value chain development process which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
from the raw materials and ends at the sale of the product, n each stage value is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
to the product and proper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
feedback
is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment. v. 4

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164 words
6.5
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