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The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. v.4

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. v. 4
The provided graph depicts the number of people who use the London Underground station from 6: 00 am to 10: 00 pm on a typical day. It can be seen that the usage of the station varies at different periods of the day but mostly it remains busy at 8. 00 am and at 6. 00 pm. At 6: 00 am, the number of passengers at the station is very low with a total of 90 passengers. However, it firmly increases up 200 to 7: 00 am at which point the traffic witnesses a drastic plunge reaching the busiest point of the day with 400 passengers. In a subsequent couple of hours, the rush relieves a little to reach 180 passengers at 10: 00 am. The following two hours observe a humble rise which eventually reached at 280 when it, thereafter, creep to 300 from 12: 00 to 14: 00. From this moment, passenger arrival faces a major decline to the daily low point of less than 100 occurring at 16: 00 while it plunges again to the second maximum of 380 at 18: 00. For 18: 00 to 20: 00, traffic eases a little bit to around 130 and finally the remain hours encountering little fluctuation at 150.
The provided graph depicts the number of
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people
who
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use
the London Underground station from 6: 00 am to 10: 00 pm on a typical day. It can be
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seen
that the usage of the station varies at
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different
periods of the day
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but
mostly
it remains busy at 8. 00 am and at 6. 00 pm.

At 6: 00 am, the number of
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passengers
at the station is
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very
low with a total of 90
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passengers
.
However
, it
firmly
increases up 200 to 7: 00 am at which point the traffic witnesses a drastic plunge reaching the busiest point of the day with 400
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passengers
. In a subsequent couple of hours, the rush relieves a
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little
to reach 180
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passengers
at 10: 00 am. The following two hours observe a humble rise which
eventually
reached at 280 when it, thereafter, creep to 300 from 12: 00 to 14: 00. From this moment,
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passenger
arrival faces a major decline to the daily low point of less than 100 occurring at 16: 00 while it plunges again to the second maximum of 380 at 18: 00. For 18: 00 to 20: 00, traffic
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eases
a
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little bit
to around 130 and
finally
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the remain
hours encountering
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little
fluctuation at 150.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. v. 4

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  American English
2 paragraphs
209 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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