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The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. v.3

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. v. 3
The provided line graph shows information about the numbers of people who use the underground station in London around the clock of a typical day. As is observed from the graph, the busiest times at the underground station are 8: 00 am and 6: 00 pm. The highest numbers of people use the station in the morning and more specifically at around 8: 00 in the morning. A rapid growth can be observed between 6: 00 am and 8: 00 am in the morning when around 400 people use the station at around 7: 30 am. This number then quickly drops to below 200 at around 10: 00 am. Again this number rises between 11: 00 and 3: 00 pm when around 300 people use the underground station with some fluctuations. In the afternoon, this number decline, with less than 100 people using the station at 4: 00 pm. At 6: 00 pm this number reaches at 380. After 7: 00 pm, the total number of passengers declines significantly and fluctuates for the last two hours from 8: 00 pm to 10: 00 pm. In summary, London underground station remains busy in the starting of the day at morning and in the early evening.
The provided line graph
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who
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underground
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station
in London
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around
the clock of a typical day. As
is observed
from the graph, the busiest times at the
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underground
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station
are 8: 00 am and 6: 00 pm.

The highest
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numbers
of
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people
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use
the
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station
in the
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morning
and more
specifically
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around
8: 00 in the
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morning
. A rapid growth can
be observed
between 6: 00 am and 8: 00 am in the
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morning
when
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around
400
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people
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the
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station
at
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around
7: 30 am. This
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number
then
quickly
drops to below 200 at
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around
10: 00 am. Again this
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number
rises between 11: 00 and 3: 00 pm when
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around
300
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people
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underground
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station
with
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some
fluctuations.

In the afternoon, this
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number
decline, with less than 100
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people
using the
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station
at 4: 00 pm. At 6: 00 pm this
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number
reaches at 380. After 7: 00 pm, the total
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number
of passengers declines
significantly
and fluctuates for the last two hours from 8: 00 pm to 10: 00 pm.

In summary, London
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station
remains busy in the starting of the day at
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morning
and in the early evening.
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33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. v. 3

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4 paragraphs
204 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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