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The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. v.2

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. v. 2
The graph shows the number of passengers travelling at various times in an underground station in London. As per the chart, there are 400 passengers travelling at 8. 00 am and this seems to be the time that the majority of the travelling takes place. This might be because people usually go to work or children to school at this time; hence, 8. 00 am has the highest number of people using the underground station. Moreover, the second highest numbers of travellers were, with a slightly less number than 8. 00 am in the evening travel, at 18. 00 having 390 travellers. Hence, the immediate justification would be as it is the time, people travelling back after work. However, it is noticeable that the least number of people use the underground at 4. 00 pm and 6. 00 am assuming it is the same type of people travelling back and forth at different times for starting work and finishing work. It is also observed that the number of people travelling (300) seems to happen frequently at different times during the day. Overall, the time of the day that shows a high number of people using the underground station in London is at 8. 00am and 6. 00pm.
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station in London. As per the chart, there are 400 passengers
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at 8. 00 am and this seems to be the
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that the majority of the
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takes place. This might be
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were, with a
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than 8. 00 am in the evening travel, at 18. 00 having 390
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. It is
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station in London is at 8. 00am and 6. 00pm.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
207 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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