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The graph shows the results of a survey of British public figures that people can recognise from their photographs. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minute v.2

The graph shows the results of a survey of British public figures that people can recognise from their photographs.
The graph illustrates levels of public recognition for 4 British figure based on their photographs among 4 different age groups. As can be seen from the graph, it is obvious that among the 4 groups surveyed, the 41 to 60 age group does the best job at recognising public figures whereas the performance of those aged 20 and less seems to be the least impressive. In details, the Queen is the most recognized, with everyone aged 21 and above and the vast majority of those who are under 20 being to identify her. The Prime Minister is recognized by up to 90% of people aged 41 to 60, followed by the 80% of the 21-40 group, around two thirds of the over 60 group and only half of the youngest age group. Chancellor and Mayor of London are both identified by only 20% of those under 20. However, while the fomer is identifiable for up to 70% of people aged over 40, the later is more recognized across the 21-40 and 41-60 age groups (both at 60%).
The graph illustrates levels of public recognition for 4 British
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based on their photographs among 4
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different
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groups.

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seen
from the graph, it is obvious that among the 4
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surveyed, the 41 to 60
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age
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group
does the best job at
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recognising
public figures whereas the performance of those
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20 and less seems to be the least impressive.

In
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details
, the Queen is the most
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recognized
, with everyone
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aged
21 and above and the vast majority of those who are under 20 being to identify her. The Prime Minister is
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recognized
by up to 90% of
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people
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aged
41 to 60, followed by the 80% of the 21-40
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, around two thirds of the over 60
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group
and
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only
half of the youngest
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group.

Chancellor and Mayor of London are both identified by
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20% of those under 20.
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, while the
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fomer
is identifiable for up to 70% of
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people
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aged
over 40, the
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later
is more
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recognized
across the 21-40 and 41-60
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age
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(both at 60%).
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph shows the results of a survey of British public figures that people can recognise from their photographs.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
177 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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