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The diagram below illustrates how sugar is made from raw sugar cane. Write a report for a university lecturer that describes this process. v.2

The diagram below illustrates how sugar is made from raw sugar cane. Write a report for a university lecturer that describes this process. v. 2
The diagram gives information about the process of manufacturing sugar from raw sugar cane. Overall, the process consists of 11 steps and 3 stages. Starting when sugar cane is delivered from cane fields in mash bins, and ended with loading the dry sugar to the sugar hoppers load truck, in order to store it in the warehouse. Initially, in the first stage, after canes delivered from the cane fields in the mash bins, they are weighed and emptied onto a cane roller. Then, it is entered to a shredded cane and yields juice which is crushed out into containers. At the second stage, juice is examined for sugar content and heated up and limed in order to decrease its PH level to lower acidity. Subsequently, juice is entered into the clarifier where mud is separated from sugar and settled to the bottom. The mud is then removed through an opening located at the bottom of the clarifier. At the end of the second stage, the juice is sent to a steamer that consists of five chambers. In the steamer, evaporation of water transformed the juice to syrup. At the final stage, the syrup transferred to a vacuum pan, which it is cylinder in shape with a triangular end, there the syrup is transformed to sugar crystals. Next, the sugar is spun to clear it from molasses, which are used as stock feed and for ethanol production. Finally, wet raw sugar is transferred into cooler where it is cooled and dried and then loaded to the trucks in order to deliver the produce to the warehouse.
The diagram gives information about the process of manufacturing
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sugar
from raw
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sugar
cane.

Overall
, the process consists of 11 steps and 3
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stages
. Starting when
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sugar
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cane
is delivered
from
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cane
fields in mash bins, and ended with loading the dry
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sugar
to the
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sugar
hoppers load truck, in order to store it in the warehouse.

Initially
, in the
first
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stage
, after
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canes
delivered from the
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cane
fields in the mash bins, they
are weighed
and emptied onto a
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cane
roller. Then, it
is entered
to a shredded
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cane
and yields
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juice
which
is crushed
out into containers. At the second
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stage
,
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juice
is examined
for
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sugar
content and heated up and limed in order to decrease its PH level to lower acidity.
Subsequently
,
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juice
is entered
into the clarifier where mud
is separated
from
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sugar
and settled to the bottom. The mud is then removed through an opening located at the bottom of the clarifier. At the
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end
of the second
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stage
, the
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juice
is
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sent
to a steamer that consists of five chambers. In the steamer, evaporation of water transformed the
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juice
to syrup.

At the final
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stage
, the syrup transferred to a vacuum pan, which it is cylinder in shape with a triangular
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end
, there the syrup
is transformed
to
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sugar
crystals.
Next
, the
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sugar
is spun
to
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clear
it from molasses, which are
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used
as stock feed and for ethanol production.
Finally
, wet raw
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sugar
is transferred
into cooler where it
is cooled
and dried and then loaded to the trucks in order to deliver the produce to the warehouse.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram below illustrates how sugar is made from raw sugar cane. Write a report for a university lecturer that describes this process. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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