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The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050.
The graph illustrates the population figures of India and China since 2000 and predicted population rise until 2050. In overall, the graph has an upward trend and India has the highest figure comparing to China, which is 1, 600 billion. China population was above 1, 200 billion in 2000 while India population was only 1, 000 which is the lowest point in the graph. Both figures began to rise moderately although India data rose slightly faster. In addition, both of the figures were predicted to continue rising at the same speed for almost three decades. They were expected to surpass 1, 400 in 2030. Then at this point, differences will appear as China figures is ancitipated to fall slightly throughout the rest of 20 years and finally reach 1, 400 in 2050. In contrast, India is predicted to rise with an unchanged speed and soon will leave a far distance to China as it’s expected to reach the peak of the graph which is 1, 600 billion in 2050.
The
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illustrates the
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population
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of India and China since 2000 and predicted
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population
rise until 2050. In
overall
, the
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has an upward trend and India has the highest
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comparing to China, which is 1, 600 billion.

China
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population
was above 1, 200 billion in 2000 while India
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population
was
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only
1, 000 which is the lowest point in the
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. Both
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figures
began to rise
moderately
although India data rose
slightly
faster.
In addition
, both of the
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figures
were predicted
to continue rising at the same speed for almost three decades. They were
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expected
to surpass 1, 400 in 2030. Then at this point, differences will appear as China
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figures
is
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ancitipated
to fall
slightly
throughout the rest of 20 years and
finally
reach 1, 400 in 2050.
In contrast
, India
is predicted
to rise with an unchanged speed and
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soon
will
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leave
a far distance to China as it’s
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expected
to reach the peak of the
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which is 1, 600 billion in 2050.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050.

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2 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
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