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the bar and line graph illustrates use of speed camera along with numerical information on road accident for the city which is in Melbourne. v.2

the bar and line graph illustrates use of speed camera along with numerical information on road accident for the city which is in Melbourne. v. 2
the bar and line graph illustrates use of speed camera along with numerical information on road accident for the city which is in Melbourne. first bar graph for started from 2002 in this year only 25 cameras used in Melbourne have a power after 1 year it was increased after the double of last year is nearly 50 in 2003 number of speed cameras were used also show price of in 2004 from half of hundred to more than hundred normal changes was shown in the year 2005 which was highest among every year and it was around 150. in the line graph accidents ratio was quite above from 3% in 2002 whereas in that your percentage of that was in ten affection after the measurement of your accident number was slightly increased from last couple of yours in the year of 2004 death ratio was started from initial point which was one end of the year both show increment in the numbers. overall number of speed cameras in Melbourne city was constantly increasing every year was accident ratio was quite higher than that death.
the
bar and line graph illustrates
use
of speed
camera
along with numerical information on road
accident
for the city which is in Melbourne.

first
bar graph for
started
from 2002 in this
year
only
25
cameras
used
in Melbourne have a power after 1
year
it
was increased
after the double of last
year
is
nearly
50 in 2003 number of speed
cameras
were
used
also
show
price of in 2004 from half of hundred to more than
hundred
normal
changes
was shown
in the
year
2005 which was highest among every
year
and it was around 150.

in
the line graph
accidents
ratio was quite above from 3% in 2002 whereas in that your percentage of that was in ten affection after the measurement of your
accident
number was
slightly
increased from last couple of yours in the
year
of 2004 death ratio was
started
from initial point which was one
end
of the
year
both
show
increment in the numbers.

overall
number of speed
cameras
in Melbourne city was
constantly
increasing every
year
was
accident
ratio was quite higher than that death.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic the bar and line graph illustrates use of speed camera along with numerical information on road accident for the city which is in Melbourne. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
185 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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