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The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2016. v.1

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2016. v. 1
The bar chart compares the ratio of male and female academic personnel in different departments of a university in 2016. A glance at the graph reveals that the proportion of male academics in Engineering, science, law and business was higher while there were more female staffs in faculties like arts, education and medicine. According to the illustration, engineering faculties was predominated by male instructors in 2016 as 85% of them were males. Law, business and science faculties also had a higher number of male academics, approximately six out of ten academic staffs were male. Interestingly, a similar percentage of staffs from both genders were employed in the faculty of medicine in this university. Looking further, arts and education faculties of this university had far more female teachers than that of males. In education faculty, more than seven in ten active academics were female. Female staff’s dominance is obvious in the faculty of Arts as well and their ratio was roughly 60%.
The bar chart compares the ratio of male and
female
academic
personnel in
different
departments of a university in 2016. A glance at the graph reveals that the proportion of male
academics
in Engineering, science, law and business was higher while there were more
female
staffs
in faculties like arts, education and medicine.

According to the illustration, engineering faculties
was predominated
by male instructors in 2016 as 85% of them were
males
. Law, business and science faculties
also
had a higher number of male
academics
, approximately six out of ten
academic
staffs
were male.
Interestingly
, a similar percentage of
staffs
from both genders
were employed
in the faculty of medicine in this university.

Looking
further
, arts and education faculties of this university had far more
female
teachers than that of
males
. In education faculty, more than seven in ten active
academics
were
female
.
Female
staff’s
dominance is obvious in the faculty of Arts
as well
and their ratio was roughly 60%.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2016. v. 1

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