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The graph shows the number of visitors for three different areas in the European country between 1987 to 2007. v.2

The graph shows the number of visitors for three different areas in the European country between 1987 to 2007. v. 2
The line graph illustrates how many visitors travel to three categories of attractions, namely the coast, the mountain and the lake, in a European country over the course of 20 years starting in 1987. Overall, the country witnessed an upward trend in three types of tourists. Throughout the period, the coast was always the most popular tourism. In 1987, there was about 70. 000 persons who visited the coast. This amount of visitors fell gradually to 50. 000 by 1997. The figure tended to rise steadily after 1997 to reached 80. 000 in 2007. In 1987, the number of visitors those went to the mountain and the lake were around 20. 000 and 30. 000 respectively. The figure of visitors to the mountain increased sharply to its peak of 70. 000 in 2003 before falling down to 60. 000 in 2007. The amount of tourists in the lake rose marginally to 40. 000 in 2007. It was, therefore, the least popular of the attraction at the end of the period.
The line graph illustrates how
many
visitors
travel to three categories of attractions,
namely
the coast, the mountain and the lake, in a European country over the course of 20 years starting in 1987.

Overall
, the country witnessed an upward trend in three types of tourists. Throughout the period, the coast was always the most popular tourism.

In 1987, there was about 70. 000 persons who visited the coast. This amount of
visitors
fell
gradually
to 50. 000 by 1997. The figure tended to rise
steadily
after 1997 to reached 80. 000 in 2007.

In 1987, the number of
visitors
those went to the mountain and the lake were around 20. 000 and 30. 000
respectively
. The figure of
visitors
to the mountain increased
sharply
to its peak of 70. 000 in 2003
before
falling down to 60. 000 in 2007. The amount of tourists in the lake rose
marginally
to 40. 000 in 2007. It was,
therefore
, the least popular of the attraction at the
end
of the period.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph shows the number of visitors for three different areas in the European country between 1987 to 2007. v. 2

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170 words
6.5
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