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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. v.2

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. v. 2
The bar graph compares museum visitors to three different types of museums in London from 2007 to 2012. As is presented in the graph, the National Gallery got higher popularity over time and the highest number of people visited those museums in 2012. According to the diagram, initially in 2007, more than 12 million people visited the British Museum while this number was more than 13 million for Victoria and Albert Museum and only 6. 5 million for the National Gallery. The popularity of Victoria and Albert museum remain almost the same next year while it declined for other two museums. The National Gallery Museum got a higher number of visitors each year while the total number of visitors decreased in 2009, 2010 and in 2011. Finally, in 2012, the National Gallery attracted the largest segment of visitors, amounting over 15 million, while the British Museum was visited by roughly 13 million people. Victoria and Albert Museum was attended by 10 million guests at that time. In summary, National Gallery gained popularity over the time and more people visited the London Museums in 2007 and in 2012 than they did in the years in between.
The bar graph compares
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museum
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visitors
to three
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different
types of
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museums
in London from 2007 to 2012. As
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National
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Gallery
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got
higher popularity over time and the highest
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number
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people
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visited
those
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museums
in 2012.

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initially
in 2007, more than 12
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million
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people
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visited
the British
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Museum
while this
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number
was more than 13
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million
for Victoria and Albert
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Museum
and
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6. 5
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million
for the
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National
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Gallery
. The popularity of Victoria and Albert
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remain almost the same
next
year while it declined for other two
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museums
. The
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National
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Gallery
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a higher
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of
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visitors
each year while the total
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number
of
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visitors
decreased in 2009, 2010 and in 2011.

Finally
, in 2012, the
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National
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Gallery
attracted the largest segment of
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visitors
, amounting over 15
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million
, while the British
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was
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visited
by roughly 13
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. Victoria and Albert
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was attended
by 10
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million
guests at that time.

In summary,
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National
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Gallery
gained popularity over the time and more
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people
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visited
the London
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Museums
in 2007 and in 2012 than they did in the years in between.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
195 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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