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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 v.1

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 v. 1
The line graph compares the number of foreign visitors to types of different places in European country from 1987 to 2007. In general terms, there was significant increase in the number of foregin travelers to the coast, the mountains and the lakes in European. Besides, the coast was always the most popular choice of visitors, except for the year 2002. It is clear from the line graph show that between 1987 to 2007, there was a total of 40 thousands to the coast. In 1987, this figure dropped slightly to 35 thousands and then to reached a peak nearly 75 thousands in 2007. On the other hand, the number of travelers to the lakes was 10 thousands in 1987. After, this figure rose dramatically frim 1987 to 2002 and reached a peak at around 75 thousands in 2002. As can be seen, the lakes is a popular choice of foreign visitors in 2002. In contracst, there was a total of 20 thousands to the mountains. This figure for the number of travelers to the mountains fluctuated wildly before ending at approximately 35 thousands in 2007. However, it is noticeable that the mountains and the lakes were equal the number of overseas visitors in 1992.
The line graph compares the
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number
of foreign
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different
places in European country from 1987 to 2007.

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terms, there was significant increase in the
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number
of
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foregin
travelers to the coast, the
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mountains
and the
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lakes
in European.
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, the coast was always the most popular choice of
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visitors
,
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except for
the year 2002.

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clear
from the line graph
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show
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between 1987 to 2007
, there was a total of 40 thousands to the coast. In 1987, this figure dropped
slightly
to 35 thousands and then
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a peak
nearly
75 thousands in 2007.
On the other hand
, the
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number
of travelers to the
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lakes
was 10 thousands in 1987. After, this figure rose
dramatically
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frim
1987 to 2002 and reached a peak at around 75 thousands in 2002. As can be
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seen
, the
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lakes
is a popular choice of foreign
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visitors
in 2002.

In
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contracst
, there was a total of 20 thousands to the
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mountains
. This figure for the
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number
of travelers to the
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mountains
fluctuated
wildly
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before
ending at approximately 35 thousands in 2007.
However
, it is noticeable that the
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mountains
and the
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lakes
were equal the
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number
of overseas
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visitors
in 1992.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 v. 1

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