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Ielts task 1, TableThe table below shows the average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on daily activities v.2

Ielts task 1, TableThe table below shows the average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on daily activities v. 2
The graph illustrates the average amount of time spent on daily routines by UK men and women. Overall, it is obvious that both men and women spend most of their time on sleeping and doing all the entertainment activities. Besides, it takes women more time to do housework and take care of children than men while men spend more time on working and studying. First, it takes men and women 8. 04 and 8. 18 hours to sleep respectively. Additionally, the number of hours used for all the leisure activities by men is 5. 25 hours and this number for women is 4. 53. Next, men say they spend 1. 32 hour a day on travelling and 1. 22 hour is said by women. Men spend 3. 45 hours everyday for their working and studying but only 2. 26 hours is spent by women on the same purposes. In contrast, 3 hours is spent on doing housework by women, which is 2 times higher than men with 1. 41 hour a day. Similarly, while women use 0. 32 hour for taking care of children, men spend only 0. 15 hour. Finally, it takes men 0. 13 hour to do sports and this figure for women is 0. 07 hour a day.
The graph illustrates the average amount of
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time
spent on daily routines by UK
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men
and women.

Overall
, it is obvious that both
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men
and
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women
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spend
most of their
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time
on sleeping and doing all the entertainment activities.
Besides
, it takes
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women
more
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time
to do housework and take care of children than
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men
while
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men
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spend
more
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time
on working and studying.

First
, it takes
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men
and
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women
8. 04 and 8. 18
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hours
to sleep
respectively
.
Additionally
, the number of
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hours
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used
for all the leisure activities by
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men
is 5. 25
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hours
and this number for
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women
is 4. 53.
Next
,
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men
say they
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spend
1. 32
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hour
a day on travelling and 1. 22
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hour
is said
by women.

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Men
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spend
3. 45
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hours
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everyday
for their working and studying
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but
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only
2. 26
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hours
is spent
by
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women
on the same purposes.
In contrast
, 3
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hours
is spent
on doing housework by
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women
, which is 2
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times
higher than
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men
with 1. 41
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hour
a day.
Similarly
, while
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women
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use
0. 32
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hour
for taking care of children,
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men
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spend
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only
0. 15
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hour
.
Finally
, it takes
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men
0. 13
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hour
to do sports and this figure for
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women
is 0. 07
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hour
a day.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS academic Ielts task 1, TableThe table below shows the average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on daily activities v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
211 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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