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The plans below show the information on the first floor of a particular library in1995 and the same area at the present time. Select the main features shown below and give comparison where relevant. v.1

The plans below show the information on the first floor of a particular library in1995 and the same area at the present time. Select the main features shown below and give comparison where relevant. v. 1
The two pictures show the area and decoration changing of the first floor in a particular library in the year 1995 and now. It seems this library become easier to find particular area and is cut off some parts with time goes by. In 1995, when visitors entered the library by entrance in map’s bottom, they first saw three areas, study tables and chair, a small book display platform and an area which provide newspapers for people to read. They located in the central. However in nowadays the central area is occupied by the book display. Then in the left hand, visitors could find local reference books in 1995, and now it changes into area which hold new books. In 1995 the library has place where behind the local reference books area for people to use computers. But it had no internet access. But now the place is full of chairs and the computer area has occupied the place where provided reference books and maps in 1995. Also now the library can serve internet access toward its visitors. The librarian’s desk replaced by self-service desk and the only area that has no change is the photocopiers which visitors can see in the right hand of the entrance.
The two pictures
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show
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area
and decoration changing of the
first
floor in a particular library in the year 1995 and
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now
. It seems this library become easier to find particular
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area
and is
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cut
off
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some
parts with time goes by.

In 1995, when
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visitors
entered the library by entrance in map’s bottom, they
first
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saw
three
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areas
, study tables and chair, a
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small
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book
display platform and an
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area
which provide newspapers for
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people
to read. They located in the central.
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nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: "nowadays".
in nowadays
the central
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area
is occupied
by the
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book
display. Then in the
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left
hand,
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visitors
could find local reference
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books
in 1995, and
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now
it
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changes
into
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area
which hold new
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books
. In 1995 the library has place where behind the local reference
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books
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area
for
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people
to
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use
computers.
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it had no internet access.
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now
the place is full of chairs and the computer
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area
has occupied the place where provided reference
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books
and maps in 1995.
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Also
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now
the library can serve internet access toward its
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visitors
. The librarian’s desk replaced by self-service desk and the
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only
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area
that has no
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change
is the photocopiers which
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visitors
can
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in the right hand of the entrance.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The plans below show the information on the first floor of a particular library in1995 and the same area at the present time. Select the main features shown below and give comparison where relevant. v. 1

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
207 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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