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The bar chart below shows the number of employees from the European Union in the United States (1999). v.4

The bar chart below shows the number of employees from the European Union in the United States (1999). v. 4
The bar graph gives information about science and technology employees born in the EU worked in the US in the year 1999. From the graph, it is apparent that among the EU countries, the employees of British were the largest with 28, 000 employees in the US in 1999, followed by 25, 000 German employees. Compared to the British and the Germans, employees who were born in France and Italy were 3000 and 4000, respectively. Other EU countries in total had lower staff than those of Britain and Germany, but more employees than those of Italy and France in the US in 1999. Overall, the English-speaking countries. great Britain, had the highest employment rate in the US in 1999, in contrast to France which had the lowest employment rates among four important developed countries in the UE.
The bar graph gives information about science and technology
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employees
born in the EU worked in the US in the year 1999.

From the graph, it is apparent that among the EU
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countries
, the
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employees
of British were the largest with 28, 000
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employees
in the US in 1999, followed by 25, 000 German
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employees
. Compared to the British and the Germans,
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employees
who
were born
in France and Italy were 3000 and 4000,
respectively
. Other EU
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countries
in total had lower staff than those of Britain and Germany,
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but
more
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employees
than those of Italy and France in the US in 1999.

Overall
, the English-speaking
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countries
.
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great Britain
, had the highest employment rate in the US in 1999,
in contrast
to France which had the lowest employment rates among four
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important
developed
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countries
in the UE.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the number of employees from the European Union in the United States (1999). v. 4

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  American English
3 paragraphs
137 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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