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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. v.1

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. v. 1
The bar graph compares visitors to three museums in London from 2007 to 2012. Generally speaking, National Gallery and the British museums attracted the largest spectators in 2012 though Victoria and Albert Museum was more popular in early years. As the data suggests, National Gallery received the least visitors (roughly 6 million) in 2007 and its visitors gradually progressed to make it the most visited museum in London in 2012. Approximately 16 million people went to enjoy National Gallery in 2012. Victoria and Albert Museum had the largest fans in 2007 as it was toured by almost 13 million people. It was the most popular museum among the three both in 2007 and 2008 but sharply lost the battle of visitors’ number. From 2010 to 2012, this museum had been attended by the least number of spectators. Finally, the British Museum was the second most famous museum in 2007 with its nearly 12 million fans but its visitors' number declined in subsequent three years.   In 2011, it was the most attended museum in London in regards to the visitor's number but it became the second most toured museum next year with roughly 14 million visitants.
The bar graph compares
visitors
to three
museums
in London from 2007 to 2012.
Generally
speaking, National Gallery and the British
museums
attracted the largest spectators in 2012 though Victoria and Albert
Museum
was more popular in early years.

As the data suggests, National Gallery received the least
visitors
(roughly 6
million)
in 2007 and its
visitors
gradually
progressed to
make
it the most visited
museum
in London in 2012. Approximately 16
million
people
went to enjoy National Gallery in 2012.

Victoria and Albert
Museum
had the largest fans in 2007 as it
was toured
by almost 13
million
people
. It was the most popular
museum
among the three both in 2007 and 2008
but
sharply
lost the battle of
visitors’
number
. From 2010 to 2012, this
museum
had
been attended
by the least
number
of spectators.

Finally
, the British
Museum
was the second most
famous
museum
in 2007 with its
nearly
12
million
fans
but
its visitors'
number
declined in subsequent three years.
 
In 2011, it was the most attended
museum
in London
in regards to
the visitor's
number
but
it became the second most toured
museum
next
year with roughly 14
million
visitants.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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