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The graph shows the income of four cafes in New York in last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. v.2

The graph shows the income of four cafes in New York in last year.
The line chart describes the changing trends of the profits from four different cafes (The Tea Room, Internet Express, Wi-fi Cafe, and Cafe Cool) in New York throughout one full year, from January to December last year. The surveyed data was measured in Dollars. In overview, the patterns were uncertain over the year. One cafe, The Tea Room cafe, was reported to have a downward trend, while there were upward trends taken for three other cafes. Initially, The Tea Room cafe became the highest revenue among others at the beginning of the year, with its number achieving by 160. Nevertheless, at the end of the year, there was a contradictory situation in which putting The Tea Room cafe as the lowest earning, recorded by about 40. That dramatic decrease happened with some increases in three different months, March, May, and October. By contrast, three cafes with their low incomes in January experienced sharp increases over the year and took their rates as the top three cafes with the biggest profits. Regardless of that similar upward trend, those three cafes had some different details in several months of the year. From January to July, the income of Internet Express cafe gradually decreased by under 100 to around 80, while there was a steady increase in the trend of Wi-fi cafe' s profit during the period, shown by above 40 to under 100. Differently, a fluctuating progression of monthly incomes from Cafe Cool was recorded by about 30 to under 40 over the same time. Furthermore, from August until December, Internet Express cafe and Cafe Cool underwent constant rises in the earning progression, by under 100 to under 140 and by under 60 until 120, respectively. Meanwhile, the revenue of Wi-fi cafe slightly reduced to about 60, and then jumped up to above 180, within the period.
The line chart
describes
the changing
trends
of the profits from four
different
cafes
(The
Tea
Room
, Internet Express,
Wi-fi
Cafe
, and
Cafe
Cool) in New York throughout one full
year
, from January to December last
year
. The surveyed data
was measured
in Dollars. In overview, the patterns were uncertain over the
year
. One
cafe
, The
Tea
Room
cafe
,
was reported
to have a downward
trend
, while there were upward
trends
taken for three other
cafes
.

Initially
, The
Tea
Room
cafe
became the highest revenue among others at the beginning of the
year
, with its number achieving by 160.
Nevertheless
, at the
end
of the
year
, there was a contradictory situation in which putting The
Tea
Room
cafe
as the lowest earning, recorded by about 40. That dramatic decrease happened with
some
increases in three
different
months, March, May, and October.

By contrast, three
cafes
with their low incomes in January experienced sharp increases over the
year
and took their rates as the top three
cafes
with the biggest profits. Regardless of that similar upward
trend
, those three
cafes
had
some
different
details
in several months of the
year
. From January to July, the income of Internet Express
cafe
gradually
decreased by under 100 to around 80, while there was a steady increase in the
trend
of
Wi-fi
cafe&
#039; s profit during the period, shown by above 40 to under 100.
Differently
, a fluctuating progression of monthly incomes from
Cafe
Cool
was recorded
by about 30 to under 40 over the same time.
Furthermore
, from August until December, Internet Express
cafe
and
Cafe
Cool underwent constant rises in the earning progression, by under 100 to under 140 and by under 60 until 120,
respectively
. Meanwhile, the revenue of
Wi-fi
cafe
slightly
reduced
to about 60, and then jumped up to above 180, within the period.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph shows the income of four cafes in New York in last year.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
305 words
6.0
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