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The charts below show the percentage of school-aged boys and girls in secondary school and higher education in four region in the world in 2000. v.2

The charts below show the percentage of school-aged boys and girls in secondary school and higher education in four region in the world in 2000. v. 2
The bar charts give information about the rate of men and women, being in school-aged, going to secondary school and higher education in four regions in the world in 2000. Overall, the percentage of school-aged boys and girls in intermediate school was much more than that of further education. Another interesting point is the latter and the former shared the similar pattern on ranking among four regions examined, with the highest proportion being possessed by Europe, followed by America and South Asia, while Sub-Saharan Africa region hold the smallest figure in the charts. While almost entire young people in recommended age went to middle school in Europe, the opposite was true for Sub-Saharan Africa with the percentage of boys and girls getting such school being 30% and 24% respectively, being less than one-third of the figure of Europe. Additionally, almost 60% of school children in both genders attended high school in America and South Asia. Interestingly, the rate of women being higher than that of men by almost twofold in higher education was only seen in America region in the chart (29% and 17% respectively), the opposite was true for other regions with the different between the figure of two genders being no more than 5%. In addition, there was almost 60% teenagers in Europe continuing their education path in college and university, being over two times as high as the figure of America and South Asia, strikingly, higher than that of Sub-Saharan Africa by six fold.
The bar charts give information about the rate of
men
and women, being in school-aged, going to secondary
school
and higher
education
in four
regions
in the world in 2000.

Overall
, the percentage of school-aged boys and girls in intermediate
school
was much more than that of
further
education
. Another interesting point is the latter and the former shared the similar pattern on ranking among four
regions
examined, with the highest proportion
being possessed
by Europe, followed by America and South Asia, while Sub-Saharan Africa
region
hold the smallest
figure
in the charts.

While
almost
entire young
people
in recommended age went to middle
school
in Europe, the opposite was true for Sub-Saharan Africa with the percentage of boys and girls getting such
school
being 30% and 24%
respectively
, being less than one-third of the
figure
of Europe.
Additionally
,
almost
60% of
school
children in both genders attended high
school
in America and South Asia.

Interestingly
, the rate of women being higher than that of
men
by
almost
twofold in higher
education
was
only
seen
in America
region
in the chart (29% and 17%
respectively
), the opposite was true for other
regions
with the
different
between the
figure
of two genders being no more than 5%.
In addition
, there was
almost
60%
teenagers
in Europe continuing their
education
path in college and university, being over two times as high as the
figure
of America and South Asia,
strikingly
, higher than that of Sub-Saharan Africa by
six fold
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The charts below show the percentage of school-aged boys and girls in secondary school and higher education in four region in the world in 2000. v. 2

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