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Revenue Sources and Expenditures of a USA Charity in one year, 2016. Task 1 Sample - Revenue sources and expenditure of a charityTask 1 Sample - Revenue sources and expenditure of a charity v.2

Revenue Sources and Expenditures of a USA Charity in one year, 2016. Task 1 Sample - Revenue sources and expenditure of a charityTask 1 Sample - Revenue sources and expenditure of a charity v. 2
The pie charts show the amount of revenue and expenditures in 2016 for a children’s charity in the USA. Overall, it can be seen that donated food accounted for the majority of the income, while program services accounted for the most expenditure. Total revenue sources just exceeded outgoings. In detail, donated food provided most of the revenue for the charity, at 86%. Similarly, with regard to expenditures, one category, program services, accounted for nearly all of the outgoings, at 95. 8%. The other categories were much smaller. Community contributions, which were the second largest revenue source, brought in 10. 4% of overall income, and this was followed by program revenue, at 2. 2%. Investment income, government grants, and other income were very small sources of revenue, accounting for only 0. 8% combined. There were only two other expenditure items, fundraising and management and general, accounting for 2. 6% and 1. 6% respectively. The total amount of income was $53, 561, 580, which was just enough to cover the expenditures of $53, 224, 896.
The pie charts
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the amount of
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and
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expenditures
in 2016 for a children’s charity in the USA.
Overall
, it can be
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seen
that donated food accounted for the majority of the
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income
, while program services accounted for the most
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expenditure
. Total
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revenue
sources
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just
exceeded outgoings.

In detail, donated food provided most of the
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revenue
for the charity, at 86%.
Similarly
, with regard to
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expenditures
, one category, program services, accounted for
nearly
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all of the
outgoings, at 95. 8%.

The other categories were much smaller. Community contributions, which were the second largest
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revenue
source, brought in 10. 4% of
overall
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income
, and this
was followed
by program
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revenue
, at 2. 2%. Investment
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income
,
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government
grants, and other
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income
were
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very
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small
sources of
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revenue
, accounting for
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only
0. 8% combined.

There were
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only
two other
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expenditure
items, fundraising and management and general, accounting for 2. 6% and 1. 6%
respectively
. The total amount of
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income
was $53, 561, 580, which was
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just
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enough
to cover the
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expenditures
of $53, 224, 896.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic Revenue Sources and Expenditures of a USA Charity in one year, 2016. Task 1 Sample - Revenue sources and expenditure of a charityTask 1 Sample - Revenue sources and expenditure of a charity v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
173 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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