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The chart below shows annual sales by value of different types of books at one chain of booksellers from 2000 to 2004. v.2

The chart below shows annual sales by value of different types of books at one chain of booksellers from 2000 to 2004. v. 2
The bar chart compares the number of kinds of books at a particular chain of bookshop between 2000 and 2004. In general, there was a slow increase in the value of two kinds of books, namely ladies’ romantic fiction and children’s books, while the figure for educational books decreased. In particular, ladies’ romantic fiction was more common than any other types of books throughout the period shown. In 2000, the sales value of ladies’ romantic fiction was the most popular type of book which stood at 45 million, while children’s books and educational books achieved at 38 million and 33 million orderly. Moreover, the number of ladies’ romantic fiction continued increasing gradually over the next 4 years and ended the period at 53 million. Similarly, children’s books underwent a similar trend, with the figure increasing to 41 million in 2004. In contrast, the figure for educational books remained unchanged at 33 million from 2000 to 2003 and then decreased to 30 million at the end of the period.
The bar chart compares the number of kinds of
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books
at a particular chain of bookshop between 2000 and 2004.

In general
, there was a slow increase in the value of two kinds of
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books
,
namely
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ladies’
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romantic
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fiction
and children’s
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books
, while the figure for educational
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books
decreased.
In particular
,
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ladies’
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romantic
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fiction
was more common than any other types of
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books
throughout the period shown.

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In
2000, the sales value of
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ladies’
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romantic
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fiction
was the most popular type of
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book
which stood at 45
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million
, while children’s
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books
and educational
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books
achieved at 38
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million
and 33
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million
orderly.
Moreover
, the number of
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ladies’
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romantic
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fiction
continued increasing
gradually
over the
next
4 years and ended the period at 53
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million
.
Similarly
, children’s
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books
underwent a similar trend, with the figure increasing to 41
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million
in 2004.

In contrast
, the figure for educational
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books
remained unchanged at 33
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million
from 2000 to 2003 and then decreased to 30
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million
at the
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end
of the period.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below shows annual sales by value of different types of books at one chain of booksellers from 2000 to 2004. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
168 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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