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The graph shows the data about the annual earning of three different bakeries in London from 2000 to 2010. v.2

The graph shows the data about the annual earning of three different bakeries in London from 2000 to 2010. v. 2
The line graph compares the information about the annual income earned by different three bakeries namely lovely loaves, Bernie' s buns and Robbie bakery in London from 2000 to 2010. As an overview, in the first year the highest income observed in the lovely loaves which replaced by Robbie bakery in the last year. It is clear from the chart that, in 2000 the yearly income of Lovely loaves was 80, 000 thousand pounds. Whereas, the same total of other two bakeries noticed as roughly 75 thousand pounds. However, this bakery remained erratic and it dropped to 40 thousand pound in 2010. Moving towards other two bakeries, a consistency can observed in the yearly income of Robbie bakery with almost 55 thousand pounds. Afterwards, there was continuing rise in the annual income. Making it, the most profitable in the last two years at around 105, 000 thousand pounds in the last year. Furthermore, the annual income of Bernie' s buns around 20, 000 thousand pounds by 2003 that earning doubled. Whereas, the income remained constant for the rest of two years. At last, by 2010, as consistent growth can seen in the yearly income of this bakery around 63, 000 thousand pound in the 2010. To sum up, the increasing trend was following by the annual income of Bernie' s buns and Robert bakery. While, it was opposite in the case of Lovely loaves in the given time period.
The line graph compares the information about the annual
income
earned by
different
three bakeries

namely
lovely
loaves
,
Bernie&
#039; s buns and Robbie bakery in London from 2000 to 2010. As an overview, in the
first
year
the highest
income
observed in the
lovely
loaves
which replaced by Robbie bakery in the last year.

It is
clear
from the chart that, in 2000 the yearly
income
of
Lovely
loaves
was 80, 000 thousand pounds. Whereas, the same total of other two bakeries noticed as roughly 75 thousand pounds.
However
, this bakery remained erratic and it dropped to 40 thousand
pound
in 2010.

Moving towards other two bakeries, a consistency can observed in the yearly
income
of Robbie bakery with almost 55 thousand pounds. Afterwards, there was continuing rise in the annual
income
. Making it, the most profitable in the last two years at around 105, 000 thousand pounds in the last
year
.
Furthermore
, the annual
income
of
Bernie&
#039; s buns around 20, 000 thousand pounds by 2003 that earning doubled. Whereas, the
income
remained constant for the rest of two years. At last, by 2010, as consistent growth can
seen
in the yearly
income
of this bakery around 63, 000 thousand
pound
in the 2010.

To sum up, the increasing trend was following by the annual
income
of
Bernie&
#039; s buns and Robert bakery.
While
, it was opposite in the case of
Lovely
loaves
in the
given
time period.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph shows the data about the annual earning of three different bakeries in London from 2000 to 2010. v. 2

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