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The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. v.2

The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. v. 2
The bar chart illustrates the yearly average costs on cell phone and residential phone services among the United States customers from 2001 to 2010, in a duration of 10 years. Overall, as it can be seen the residential phone service increased during the time span. As is given in the graph, average annual expenditures on mobile and residential phone services instances by about 200 dollars and a little more than 700 dollars, respectively. In the first six years, cell phone service costs dramatically rose, although the other service expenditures for American customers gradually reduced in the same years. In the year 2006, both services cost became equal on almost $500. After that, the upward trend for mobile service costs and downward trend for residential phone service expenditures continued. In the last year of 10 decade, cell phone costs stood on approximately $750, whereas the costs for the residential phone service plunged to around 400 dollars.
The bar chart illustrates the yearly average
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on cell
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and
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residential
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among the United States customers from 2001 to 2010, in a duration of 10 years.
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phone
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increased during the time span.

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in the graph, average annual expenditures on mobile and
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residential
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phone
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services
instances by about 200 dollars and a
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more than 700 dollars,
respectively
. In the
first
six years, cell
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phone
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service
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dramatically
rose, although the other
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service
expenditures for American customers
gradually
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reduced
in the same years. In the
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2006, both
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services
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cost
became equal on almost $500. After that, the upward trend for mobile
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service
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costs
and downward trend for
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residential
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phone
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service
expenditures continued. In the last
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year
of 10 decade, cell
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phone
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costs
stood on approximately $750, whereas the
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for the
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residential
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phone
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service
plunged to around 400 dollars.
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IELTS academic The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. v. 2

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